Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Firstly, tall apartment blocks economize land area since it makes use of its vertical space compared to multiple residential areas which waste a major portion of area, multiple apartments can squeeze in more homes at each floor. Besides, heavily populated cities are rife with locals and expatriates seeking a place to live in a while they go about their business there. By utilising the apartment's geometrical structure, more homes can be provided for them at a cheaper cost.

Moreover, apartment blocks usually offer homes at a price lower than the ones set for onland homes. Bungalows, semi-detached, double story houses and others would usually be a pain in the wallet for someone without a stable or sufficient income, much like those who are new to the city. By building more apartments, more affordable housing can be accessed by many layers of the society. To paint a picture, we can visualise an example of a rookie worker at a major firm in a big city like Kuala Lumpur. He or she might not be planning to permanently reside there and raise a family but they definitely have the option of a stable house to return to at the end of a day's work. For families, they definitely can benefit the most as they do not have to pay a throat-choking price while still juggling the cost of raising children and dealing with bills and taxes.

In conclusion, governments should implement an urban-planning scheme which involve building more tall apartment blocks in large cities. In doing so, the percentage of homelessness may decrease largely. Not only that, the productivity of the city will improve and boost the country's overall economy. Homes are crucial for a harmonious and safe community as well as healing one's mental health. Although there may be other mechanisms in place to achieve this common goal, I still stand firm with my reasons.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have clearly stated your position in favor of tall apartment blocks and maintained this throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant, particularly regarding land efficiency and affordability. However, the development is somewhat limited; while you mention the benefits for workers and families, the arguments could be deepened by considering potential counter-arguments or more specific urban planning impacts. The conclusion introduces new ideas about mental health and homelessness that were not previously discussed in the body paragraphs, which slightly weakens the logical flow of your argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that all main points are introduced and fully explored within the body paragraphs rather than the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved. For example, the link between the 'rookie worker' example and the broader argument about affordability is a bit loose. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas, which helps the overall readability of the response. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'economize', 'expatriates', and 'urban-planning scheme'. There are some instances of slightly unnatural collocations or informal phrasing, such as 'pain in the wallet' and 'throat-choking price'. While these do not impede communication, they are not appropriate for an academic essay. You attempt to use less common vocabulary, but the precision is occasionally lacking. To improve, focus on using more formal academic collocations and avoiding idiomatic expressions that sound too conversational for this task type.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'it makes use of its vertical space' (referring to land area) and 'involve building' (should be 'involves'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'seeking a place to live in a while they go about their business there'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing your control over subject-verb agreement and refining complex sentence structures will help improve your accuracy.

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