Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
With the advent of twenty-first century, the suitable way for providing accommodations in developed cities is to construct enormous apartment blocks. I partially agree with the notion as for the development of the area, it is a necessary step to be taken.
The predominant reason for my agreement is, authorities should provide individuals with tall apartments which will assist in creating more employment and development of the area because when more humans will live in the area, it will create a positive impact on the nation's economy and economy will have a better increase in it. To exemplify, a survey conducted by private company states the fact that, due to apartments the development of the city has significantly increased due to better employment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 123 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth or specific examples to support the claim. The essay is incomplete, as it lacks a conclusion and a balanced discussion of the opposing view, which is necessary for a full response to the prompt. To improve, you must expand your arguments with detailed explanations and provide a clear, structured conclusion that summarizes your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows a basic attempt at organization with an introduction and a body paragraph. However, the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'The predominant reason for my agreement is' and 'To exemplify', but the overall flow is hindered by the lack of content. Paragraphing is present, but the structure is insufficient to demonstrate a logical development of an argument. To achieve a higher score, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas are linked more fluidly throughout the entire essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate for the topic, such as 'accommodations', 'enormous apartment blocks', and 'nation's economy'. However, the range is limited, and there is some repetition, particularly with the word 'development' and 'area'. The phrasing is sometimes slightly unnatural, such as 'economy will have a better increase in it'. To improve, try to incorporate a wider variety of synonyms and more sophisticated collocations to express your ideas with greater precision and variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'With the advent of twenty-first century' (missing 'the') and 'due to apartments the development of the city has significantly increased' (awkward phrasing). While the meaning is generally clear, the control over complex structures is inconsistent. To improve, focus on article usage, prepositional phrases, and ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound. Proofreading for minor errors will also help improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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