Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent times, Due to increasing in population their must be problems to making enough stays in major cites. I agree with the point to provide enough homes to people in larger cities is to constructing tall building blocks in a apropriate space.

To begin with, According to census population of people were increasing rapidly, due to this people are worried about staying in larger cities to be comfort.

Government may look into this problem, then proceed with an solution is to constructing taller appartment block in a little space to create more home according to their comfortness. Additionally, they also lookafter about the basetests of soil to construct the lenght of block in space.

Moreover, This gives lots of advantages for the city as well as people who are staying in such appartments. For example, constructing a 3BHk house in 3000sft is very different form building a tall appartment with limitted floors at same space provides more homes to many of citizens of cities in which most of the spaces may remains for sustainabilty for future incriment of population. People also think about theirs disciplane in others perspective also.

Although, People live together under one roof created more unity and get stronger bond between them. And also creates more employment opportunities under those appartments. An added advantage like, people gets all their needs for daily life very fast and relaible. And also it consists some drawback which are negligible as compared to advanages.

By concluding, Larger cities people must use smaller space to create enough stays and home in city for sustainability.However, this opion must be choosen for future developement but not to ruine the upcoming generation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention sustainability and employment, the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence. The explanation regarding '3BHk house in 3000sft' is confusing and does not clearly support your point about space efficiency. To improve, you should focus on expanding your main points with clearer logic and more relevant examples. The conclusion is present but somewhat vague, and the overall response feels a bit repetitive in its justification for building upwards.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Although, People live together...' and 'An added advantage like...'. Some sentences are disjointed, making the logical flow between ideas feel forced. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between the body paragraphs and the conclusion could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'problems to making enough stays', 'basetests of soil', and 'future incriment'. Phrases like 'comfortness' and 'ruine the upcoming generation' are non-standard. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'sustainability' and 'employment opportunities', the overall range is narrow. You need to focus on learning correct collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express your ideas clearly without relying on basic or incorrectly formed words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('population of people were increasing'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'Government may look into this problem, then proceed with an solution is to constructing...'. The use of complex structures is attempted but often results in errors, such as incorrect verb forms ('is to constructing'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions and articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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