Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is true that, the best way to provide enough homes in large is to build tall apartment blocks. Cities are crowded these days there no other way to provide enough homes rather than building tall apartments blocks. People are moving towards Cities day by day for better life style and large Cities have limited space.

Although, rural areas donot have enough resources or facilities like urban areas so most of the people leaving are leaving there villages for better life style, eduction and better income too. Accordingly population of Cities got almost twice or even more in past 3 years so there's no other option rather than building tall apartment blocks to provide enough houses to people.

Probing further, Cities are crowded and have only limited land because many people already living from many in years. There's some kind of hope in people that they get far better lifestyle in cities which usually attract people to move in cities, more population also needs more space and this is a problem many people living there home cities and moving forward to less crowded cities. Government trying to solve this problem by building more tall apartment block, this wasn't a solution increasing number of people moving to cities every year.

In conclusion, building tall apartment blocks is only solution to provide enough homes large cities becuase of increasing number of people moving in cities every year for better lifestyle that they can't find in rural area's and rural areas had much less facilities than cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention population growth and rural-to-urban migration, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The reasoning is somewhat circular, repeatedly stating that cities are crowded without exploring alternative solutions or the potential downsides of high-rise living. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with concrete evidence or logical consequences, ensuring that each paragraph contributes a distinct, well-supported idea rather than restating the same premise.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical or unclear. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Although' and 'In conclusion', the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. For instance, the transition 'Probing further' is used, but the subsequent paragraph struggles to maintain a clear focus on a single argument. Referencing is sometimes ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic, repetitive terms such as 'better life style', 'enough homes', and 'crowded'. There are also several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'eduction' instead of 'education' and 'there' instead of 'their'. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and more sophisticated collocations related to urban planning and demographics. Avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the essay, as this limits your ability to demonstrate lexical flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include missing articles ('in large cities'), incorrect verb forms ('population of Cities got'), and punctuation errors. There are also problems with subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic errors such as subject-verb agreement and article usage, and practice constructing more complex sentences with accurate punctuation.

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