Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

AGREE

RAPID URBANISATION - OVERPOULATED

ACCOMODATE MANY PPL AT ONE LAND

AS LARGE CITY HAS WIDE RANGE OPP. FOR HIGH STUDY, JOB PPL ARE SETTLING

IN THE CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY, PEOPLE ARE BECOMING HIGHLY COMETITIVE AND FINDING NEW WAYS TO UPGRADE THEIR STANDARD OF LIVING. SOME INDIVIDUALS ARGUE THAT SUPPORTING CITIZENS BY PROVIDING THEM HOUSING FACILITIES IN WELL DEVELOPED CITITES THROUGH CONSTRUCTION OF ROCKET SKYCRAPPERS. HOWEVER, THIS MAY LEAD TO RISK OF BRAIN DRAIN IN WEALTHY REGIONS BUT THE BENEFITS SUCH AS ACCOMODATION OF LARGE SEGMENT OF POPULATION OF SOCIETY UNDER ONE LAND FAR OUTWEIGH ITS DRWABACKS.

ONE OF THE MAJOR ADVANTAGES IS EVEN DISTRIBUTION OF LAND. PROPER PLANNING IN NUMBER OF HOUSES IN EACH APARTMENT WILL ALLOW TO MAKE INFORMED DECISION FOR FUTURE. ADDITIONALLY, WHILE LOOKING AT THE STATISTICS FOR RISING POPULACE, IT IS ADVISED TO TAKE STEPS IN A MANNER THAT DOES NOT AFFECT HUMANS AND NATURAL WOLRD.

ANOTHER ADVANTAGE IS WIDE RANGE OF OPPORTUNITES. PUBLIC CHOOSE TO LIVE IN DEVELOPING AREAS OF TOWN SO THAT THEY CAN GET AMPLE RESOURCES AND NETWORK TO PURSUE HIGHER STUDIES OR IN DOMAINS OF JOB PROSPECTUS. AS A RESULT, BY ACHIVEING THESE CERTAIN ASPECTS IN THEIR LIVES, LOCALS MAY BE IN A POSITION TO CONTRIBUTE TO THE ECOMONY AND FOSTER ITS GROWTH.MOREOVER, ACCOMODATING LARGE NUMBER OF PEOPLE TO A SPECIFIC PLOT ENALBES MAXIMUM NUMBER OF PERSONS TO ENJOY THE PERKS OF CITY LIFE. HENCE THEY CAN ENJOY BETTER STANDARD OF LIVING AND UPGRADE THEIR LIFESTLYLE WITH ADVANCEMENT OF TECHNOLOGY.

TO SUM UP, GOVERMENT NEED TO

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the first body paragraph touches on land distribution, it remains vague and lacks specific examples or logical depth. The second body paragraph discusses opportunities in cities, but the connection to the specific solution of 'tall apartment blocks' is weak. The conclusion is incomplete, which significantly impacts the overall task completion. To improve, you should provide concrete examples, such as mentioning specific cities or urban planning concepts, and ensure that every paragraph directly supports your thesis with well-reasoned arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay uses some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Another advantage', and 'To sum up' to signal transitions. However, the logical progression is hindered by the incomplete conclusion and some disjointed sentences. Paragraphing is present, but the ideas within the paragraphs are not always clearly linked to the main argument. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but shows limited range and some inaccuracies. There are several spelling errors, such as 'COMETITIVE', 'SKYCRAPPERS', 'DRWABACKS', 'ECOMONY', and 'ENALBES'. Furthermore, some word choices are awkward or imprecise, such as 'rocket skycrappers' and 'wide range opp'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'urbanisation' and 'standard of living', the frequent spelling mistakes and limited flexibility in word choice prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading your work to catch basic spelling errors and try to incorporate more precise academic collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in number of houses'), subject-verb agreement issues ('GOVERMENT need to'), and awkward phrasing ('ACCOMODATE MANY PPL AT ONE LAND'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing and capitalization. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction is noticeable. To improve, practice using complex sentence structures more accurately and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules like article usage and verb forms.

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