Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE FINEST WAY TO GIVE A PLACE TO LIVE IN HUGE CITIES IS BY CONSTRUCTING A TALL APARTMENT BLOCKS. I STRONGLY AGREE WITH THIS STATMENT. THE EXPLANATION OF THE STATMEMT IS ELABRATED IN UPCOMING PARAGRAHS.
FIRST AND FOREMOST REASON IS, TO SAVE TREES, FOREST AND FRAM AREA. TO ELABRATE, IF A TALL APARTMENT BLOCKS ARE BUILD IN THE CITIES THAN ON ONE PLACE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WILL GET HOMES RATHERTHAN CONSTRUCTING DIFFERNTLY. BY THIS FOREST AND FRAM AREA ARE SAVE FROM CUTTING DOWN. FOR EXAMPLE, 1000 PEOPLE WANT HOME TO LIVE, THAN BY BUILDING AN APARTMENT THEY DO NOT HAVE TO OCCUPY OTHER PLACES.
SECOND AND ANOTHER REASON IS, MORE PEOPLE CAN LIVE IN THAT CITY. IF ROW HOUSE OR SEPRATE HOUSE ARE BUILD THAN IT CAN COVER MORE PLACE COMPARE TO AN APARTMENT. APARTMENT CONTAIN NUMBER OF FLOORS BUT ROW HOUSE DO NOT HAVE MORE FLOOR , IN SEPRATE HOUSE ONLY ONE OR TWO FAMILYS CAN LIVE, WHILE IN APARTMENT NUMBER OF FAMILYS CAN LIVE ON DIFFRENT FLOORS.
APART FROM THIS, BY BUILDING AN APARTMENT PEOPLE CAN FACE SOME CHALLENGES LIKE PROPERTY DAMGE OR LOSE IN EARTHQUAKE. IN SOME DISASTER, A TALL BUILDING MAY FALL AND NUMBER OF PEOPLE LIVING IN THAT HOMES GETS INJUIRED OR CAN DIE. EVEN THEY CAN LOSS THEIR HOUSE BECAUSE IT WAS IN THE APARTMENT NOT ON THE LAND.
IN CONCULSION, THERE ARE SO MANY BENIFITS OF BUILDING AN APARTMENT IN THE LARGE CITIES AS THEY CAN SAVE FOREST, TRESS, FRAMS AND LAND. BUT PEOPLE CAN ALSO FACE SOME CHALLENGES LIKE LOSS OF THERE HOUSE OR LIFE IN SOME DISASTER.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position and providing reasons for it. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention saving land and increasing housing capacity, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. The third paragraph introduces a counter-argument regarding safety, but it is not well-integrated into the overall position, as it contradicts your initial strong agreement without a clear synthesis. To improve, ensure each paragraph provides a distinct, well-supported point that directly reinforces your thesis, and consider the broader implications of urban planning beyond just land conservation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'First and foremost', 'Second and another reason', 'Apart from this'). There are also issues with referencing; for instance, the transition between the benefits and the risks is abrupt, making the logical progression feel disjointed. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph flows naturally into the next by using clear topic sentences and logical transitions that connect the ideas rather than just listing them.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'place', 'homes', and 'building'. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'statment', 'elabrated', 'fram', 'differntly', 'seprate', and 'conculsion'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, occasionally make the text difficult to read. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning more precise academic vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation. Using synonyms instead of repeating the same words will also significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'if a tall apartment blocks are build' (subject-verb agreement and passive voice errors) and 'number of people living in that homes gets injuired' (plural/singular agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Once these are consistent, work on incorporating a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, with greater accuracy.
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