Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, The shortage of home is rising problem. Many people believe that the best way to solve the problem is to build a high rise buildings. I agree with this statement with carefull planning.
On the one hand, tall buildings require less space of limitef urban land. Furthermore long story building comes with the advantage of large number of apartments with the very least space then raw house. For example, countrys like Singapore with one of the large number of the homeless people they build multi story buildings to provide home and in the result they got success to reduce the number of home less people.
On the other hand, simple tall buildings without well organised planning can come up with negative results. Like building without proper air way and green space with the no parking facility leads to a lower qulity lifestyle. For example, In the China where government provide homes with less space are the mejor reason for the poor qulity life of the people who live there.
Therefore, I agree with multi story buildings in the urben areas are the best way to give home to homeless people, with the well organised planning of home with areas with the parking facility and batter infrastructure.
In conclusion, building multistory infrastructure with well prganised planning in cities helps to solving the problem of home shortege with well organised designing of different types of people with different needs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples like Singapore and China, the explanations are brief and lack depth. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement as the argument is not fully extended. To improve, ensure you expand on your reasoning with more detailed analysis and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a more comprehensive discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion' to signal shifts in your argument. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the transition between sentences is smoother, avoiding mechanical repetition of phrases like 'well organised planning'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'carefull', 'limitef', 'qulity', 'urben', 'prganised') and word choice issues (e.g., 'air way' instead of 'ventilation', 'raw house' instead of 'low-rise housing'). While the meaning is usually clear, the lack of precision and the frequent spelling mistakes prevent a higher score. Try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing to demonstrate a broader range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('the shortage of home', 'the very least space'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward phrasing ('long story building' instead of 'high-rise'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly articles and pluralization, and proofread carefully to catch minor slips in grammar and punctuation.
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