Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This is good and undenible fact that if we build tall apartment blocks then its provide enough homes in large cities. It has so many benifits and some losses also with it . we will discuss about my thoughts for this statement and some logical point also in upcoming paragraph.

On the first hand , if we starting uses this method to provide enough homes in large cities then this is so useful and moeny saver method and via this we can save trees, forest and farming place too for farmer . beacuse when people dont have enough place to build their then they starting cutting tress and cleaning forest to make land useful for house or building but if we use this method then people can easily stay their and they dont run to clean forests . For example if we read some recent incident in big cities related to this topic like into Mumbai, Delhi, Himachal so many forests cut off beacuse their are popultion range is high and dont have enough place to build house if they starting using this method then they can help animals and can save oxygen system too. Threfore, this is best way to consume peoples in small area its helpful for those cities who has large number of popultion but dont have enough space for living.

on the other hand , if we talk about large cities then they are moslty near sea or big rivers or dams .Like Mumbai ,Chennai, Goa etc. if we such large building which dont have digital tech. suport to stand up then when their are flood they destroy and whenever their is an earthquake that time also large building effect and when they fell down then they destory their here and their buildings too . for example, recently we heared about Bangkok earthquake. Their are mostly big buildings effect and they destroy their nearast building too . Hence if we wanna make big building then we have to fix limit on floor and stories .

In conclude we can use this method but before that we have to focus on area that in which area we are using it and have a proper limit that how much story building we are making. I agreed this is best way to manage public in big cities but with good building method.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits and drawbacks of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention environmental benefits and safety concerns, the arguments lack depth and specific, accurate evidence. For instance, the examples provided (Mumbai, Bangkok) are vague and lack clear logical links to the argument. The position is clear, but the supporting points are often repetitive or rely on generalizations. To improve, focus on providing more nuanced analysis of why high-density housing is or is not the best solution, rather than listing general points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical. You use basic cohesive devices like 'On the first hand' and 'In conclude', which are sometimes used incorrectly or sound unnatural. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical cohesion, as sentences often jump between ideas without smooth transitions. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'big', and 'place' throughout the essay. There are also frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'undenible', 'benifits', 'moeny', and 'popultion'. These errors occasionally make the text difficult to read. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations. Focus on learning synonyms for common words and ensuring correct spelling, as these errors currently impede the clarity of your expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('its provide', 'they starting'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which affects the overall readability. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, leading to confusion. For example, 'if we such large building which dont have digital tech. suport to stand up' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect pluralization.

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