Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In Mordern era, individuals reckon that the big cities should not have enough space. So, instead of making houses, they wish to make flats with many floors which results in more housing facilities. In this dissertation, I partially agree with this notion due to several seasons which I will articulate in subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, there are many seasons which make the statement true. First and formost reason is having lower space. To elaborate it, people who lives in big cities do-not have proper accommodation as in these cities like Bombay and delhi masses go there for having job facilities, hence these cities become crowed, to manage that crowd people like to make apartment instead of houses. Additionally, many folks are included in these appartment making process and several persons get the jobs by which they can feed their family. For instance, a article published about a apartment which was made by 200 workers which was non-employed but this project changed their life.

On the other hand, this will lead to some negative consequence. Initially, if there will be even a small mistake held in making these building can held to loss of thousands of people. To people use low quality material which results in fall of building also periodically workers donot do their work properly. Moreover, many masses want to make a luxurious and big house for their facility and making their family comfortable. To epitome in India Ambani's make a house with all the facilities like cinemas, parking centre, lobby soon and guest houses. These kind of facility are not possible in apartment .

In conclusion, making apartment can be beneficial but it can be risky at the same time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a partial stance. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the argument regarding space constraints is relevant, the supporting points—such as the employment generated by construction or the safety risks—are somewhat tangential or lack depth. The example of the Ambani residence is not particularly relevant to the general issue of urban housing density and feels like a digression. To improve, you should focus on developing arguments that directly address the 'best way' aspect of the prompt, such as sustainability, infrastructure, or social living, rather than focusing on individual construction projects or specific wealthy households.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To commence with' and 'To epitome'. There are also issues with referencing; for example, the transition between the benefits of construction and the safety risks is abrupt. The logical progression is sometimes hindered by unclear sentence connections, making the flow feel disjointed. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects back to your main thesis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Mordern era', 'seasons' (used instead of 'reasons'), 'masses' (used inappropriately to mean 'people'), and 'making apartment'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While you attempt to use some academic vocabulary, the lack of precision and the misuse of terms like 'dissertation' (this is an essay, not a dissertation) limit the score. You should focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that you use words in their correct context to improve clarity and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('people who lives', 'masses go'), article usage ('a article', 'a apartment'), and incorrect verb forms ('can held to loss'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage and capitalization. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors requires the reader to make an effort to understand the intended message. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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