Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In contemporary world, the enormous cities are considered everyone's choice. Some people think they are already becoming over-populated and housing projects should be away from them, while other thinks this is the best way to transform cities in to global icon.I believe, despites of converting cities in to hi-rise buildings the government should focus the areas of development.
The supporters of later view argue that the private and government housing projects should be planned away from crowded cities so, it could works in a better way. Many government and non-government schemes should initiate in a form of suburbs to cater their residents. For instance, In the outskirts of karachi city the development projects including housings and industrial parks have grown increasingly which not only pay benefits to the citizens but also a milestone in the growth of country's economics.
On the other-hand, The individuals who supports the later view maintain that cities should convert in to tall apartment buildings. Karachi the city of pakistan has turned to overpopulated city after being projected under different private appartments scheme drew and legalised throughout the city, subsequently, impact on common necessities for example; people are severely deprived of water, electricity and commercial gas.Moreover, it contributed in pollution as well as more denser the city is huge will be the carbon footprints in terms of extra energy consumption. in addition, negetively impact on green fields as more area covered with the projects rather than saving the green lands to save them from life threats.
In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that the houses in big cities need is inevitable ,while focusing on the areas with gaps ,where the development needs should be the best approach.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt but struggles with clarity regarding the author's position. While you argue against high-rise buildings, the introduction is confusing, and the second paragraph appears to argue for the very position you initially oppose due to poor phrasing ('The individuals who supports the later view maintain that cities should convert in to tall apartment buildings'). The ideas are relevant, but the development is hindered by these contradictions and a lack of a clear, consistent stance. To improve, ensure your thesis statement is unambiguous and that each paragraph clearly supports your central argument without confusing the reader about which side you are defending.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by confusing transitions and unclear referencing. For example, the use of 'later view' is used to refer to both sides of the argument at different times, which creates significant confusion. Cohesive devices are present, such as 'Moreover' and 'In conclusion', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly. The progression of ideas is not always smooth, and the reader often has to re-read sentences to understand the intended meaning. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring clear, consistent referencing will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede communication. Phrases like 'transform cities in to global icon' and 'denser the city is huge will be the carbon footprints' are awkward. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'despites', 'appartments', and 'negetively'. While you attempt to use more complex vocabulary, the lack of precision and the recurring spelling mistakes suggest a limited control over lexical features. Focusing on accurate word forms and common collocations will help you move to a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('it could works'), incorrect preposition usage ('despites of'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage and spacing. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, specifically checking for subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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