Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The best thing is that provides best home in the huge city is a invention of new apartments. i totally agree from this statement that every country or city have their own rights or future plans. government should try to provides every resources to humans. according to me provides home in large city level make your city more impressive and valuable. some people think its a lose of identity and lose of health yet its not about lose of anything its about security and safety.

Firstly, if government provides the enough homes to others that make our city identity and shape our city in the form of apartments. peoples took homes in city they migrate from village to city dew to some issues. they have no educational resources, healthcare issues in villages and so on. so they move to cities.

Secondly, whenever people migrate from one place to another they buy house in cities so that thing make the city apartment tall. in pakistan 79 percent people move to city. they prefer to live peacefully.

Thirdly, migration is necessary because peoples having more issues in their home town area in villages. peoples move to city for gain knowledge, education. they work in cities. on the other hand peoples have no healthcare center in village so they move to cities. people take home in cities because they cant survive in village. modern generation want to live in cities and getting education and jobs in city. in conclusion, 79 percent take aparments in city that thing make the city progress on huge level.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing agreement with the idea of building tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention migration and the need for urban resources, the arguments are not fully extended or supported with clear logic. The connection between the prompt (tall apartment blocks) and your arguments (migration, education, healthcare) is often tenuous. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific reason why tall buildings are the best solution, rather than focusing primarily on the general reasons for migration. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack depth and focus.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly', the internal flow of sentences within paragraphs is frequently confusing. For example, the transition between discussing migration and the physical structure of apartments is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother, more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'best', 'home', 'city', and 'people'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'lose of identity' (loss of identity) and 'make the city apartment tall' (which is not a standard way to describe urban development). You attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary, but it is often used inaccurately. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and avoid repeating the same basic words throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('every country or city have'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding, such as 'the best thing is that provides best home'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles. Practising the formation of complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions would also help increase your range.

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