Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
As the population of major cities continues to grow, providing sufficient housing has become a serious challenge. As the population of major cities continues to grow, providing sufficient housing has become a serious challenge. Some people argue that constructing tall apartment buildings is the best solution. I largely agree with this view because high-rise housing can accommodate many people while making efficient use of limited urban land. However, it should be combined with other approaches.
The main advantages of the big apartments to many people lives and elated peaceful life.
In the big urban areas, people facilitates most of the things. Kids have to educate with good school for better future. There are many hospitals on every block of the department for every emergency.
Most of the people furious to saw big block but they way living are prevalent, peaceful and they are help to each other at difficult times. For Instance, I'm living on a department, some threatened are comes to my home and snatch precious jewelries and heavy amounts. at that moment i called my security guard and bell the special helping ring for my safety,
Homes in crucial cities is to create tall apartment blocks are very easy to way of livings and received beneficial resources. According to my perspective, every people priority to
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a position in the introduction, the subsequent paragraphs are underdeveloped and lack a clear, logical progression. The arguments regarding the benefits of high-rise living are fragmented and do not directly address the prompt's focus on whether this is the 'best' way to provide housing. The essay ends abruptly, leaving the final argument unfinished. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure the essay is fully developed to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs do not flow logically. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical or misused, such as the transition 'For Instance' which introduces a personal anecdote that is not clearly linked to the main argument. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would greatly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'big apartments to many people lives' and 'department' used instead of 'apartment'. Phrases like 'most of the things' and 'heavy amounts' are imprecise and do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. You rely on basic vocabulary, which hinders your ability to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and practice using these words in correct sentence contexts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some threatened are comes'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'furious to saw'), and sentence fragments. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in basic syntax. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further disrupts the flow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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