Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many people think that build a tall apartment is provide more home it helps reduce overcrowding . I disagree this opinion .
Tall apartments can be stresfull and people live together they do not do what they want to do because they have neighbours and and should not disturb them . You can not have a privacy in this situation you have to control all of your activities because neıghbours can hear you easily and we don not know what they think about that . This can negatively affect their quality of life . Another problem is the appearance of tall buildings . They have a lot of home and They can make the city feel enclosed .
For example , people have diffrent life and most of the people do not want to sahre their life but if they have a live tall apartment , it looks enclosed and this is so boring . Furtheremore they have to get on well with neighbours becasuse they almost live with them .
İf you argue with them it would be awful because you have to see this people every morning and every night and sometimes you should be polite . İt is a complete nightmare .
As a resul tall apartments give a stressful life and they do not provide enough home they affect people negatively moreover they make you feel congested . Cities should create a plan for this and they should advise with poeple. Tall apartments are not solution most of the time .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited and relies on subjective, anecdotal arguments about privacy and neighborly disputes rather than addressing the broader urban planning context of housing density. The arguments are somewhat repetitive, focusing heavily on the 'stress' of living in close proximity. To improve, you should explore more objective factors such as infrastructure, cost-efficiency, or environmental impact to provide a more balanced and academic discussion. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical or disjointed. While some cohesive devices like 'Another problem' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are sometimes applied incorrectly or in a way that feels forced. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'if they have a live tall apartment', where the meaning is obscured by poor phrasing. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical progression, making the argument feel like a list of complaints rather than a cohesive essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'stressful', 'nightmare', and 'boring'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'build a tall apartment is provide more home' and 'they have a live tall apartment'. Spelling errors are also frequent (e.g., 'stresfull', 'neıghbours', 'becasuse', 'resul'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision, which restricts the overall quality of the argument. You need to focus on learning collocations and academic synonyms to improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'I disagree this opinion', 'you can not have a privacy'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To reach a higher band, you must focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that clauses are connected correctly using appropriate conjunctions rather than run-on sentences.
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