Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the ultra-modern epoch, it is a point of debate that the optimal method to provide enough homes in urban cities is to build skyscraper blocks for peoples. Undoubtedly this notion remain s successful in keeping the majority in favor. T he upcoming paragraphs would shed some light on my arguments related to conception will lead to a logical conclusion.
Analyzing the statement , I totally accord with the statement that building tall apartment block block provide sufficient homes to individuals in cities . There are myriad of reasons in my favour of my argument. The most prominent one is it solves the problem of space required to build houses. In simple words there are so much overpopulation is in urban cities to build homes requires large area of land , building tall apartment can resolve this issue because in one building several apartments can be made. Apart from it, these apartments are cheaper . To justify , these apartments are so cost effective because no one has to purchase land to build house ,people get readymade flat in buildings.
To add few more reasons, how can one forget about the society which is like family people get at their locality. To substantiate , people get proper union in form of society which can resolve any problem occurs in locality with their union.
To encapsulate , i am of the opinion that living in tall building apartments is the best way to provide enough homes to peoples as there is not any plausible argument against the phenomenon.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention space efficiency and cost-effectiveness, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the point about 'society' is vague and not clearly linked to the benefits of high-rise living. To reach a higher band, you need to provide more specific examples or detailed explanations for your claims. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not summarize the main points effectively, which limits the overall development of the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical. You use some cohesive devices like 'To add few more reasons' and 'To encapsulate', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or feel forced. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'this notion remain s successful', where it is not immediately obvious what 'this notion' refers to. Additionally, the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, and the progression of ideas could be smoother to ensure the reader follows your logic without effort.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'best', and 'big', and there are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'ultra-modern epoch' and 'proper union in form of society'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'peoples' (plural of people is already people) and 'in my favour of my argument'. Expanding your range to include more academic collocations would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('this notion remain s'), missing articles ('build tall apartment block'), and punctuation errors (spaces before commas). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency to improve your accuracy.
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