Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I agree to this statement because if we will build large buildings or tall buildings in the large or big cities that buildings will occupied less space but will provide more houses for th peoples.

Tall buildings will have more floors and that eventually provides more rooms and large rooms.

It is enough to provide homes for city population. Large cities has more population as compared to small cities so we need more buildings or house to provide houses to them. For this we need to build large buildings rather than small building with more numbers.

For example, I am living in lahore I saw there is large buildings with more rooms and many families are living there. Lahore is such large city in pakistan so population of lahore is comparatively more than other small cities.

Apartment blocks are Beneficial for people's with even large families those families who has more than 5 members.

I saw many examples in other larges cities with tall apartment blocks that are beneficial for many peoples who can not afford a house a separate house so this option is very convenient for them.

Even peoples are enjoying to living in this apartment blocks because it provides basic facilities like elevatorr electricity and parking in basements. People are living with different and taht is good for social purpose.

Peoples who are living at highest number of floor really enjoy the views of city and always prefer to stay in those apartments because of this reason.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention space efficiency and social benefits, the arguments remain repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the point about 'social purpose' is mentioned but not explained. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced arguments, such as the impact on urban infrastructure, environmental sustainability, or the psychological effects of high-density living. The current ideas are somewhat simplistic and rely on basic observations rather than a structured, analytical approach to urban planning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure; it is written as a series of short, disconnected sentences rather than cohesive paragraphs. While there is a basic logical flow, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'For this', 'For example', 'Apartment blocks are'). There is no clear introduction or conclusion, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. To improve, you should group related ideas into distinct paragraphs and use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences and arguments more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple words like 'large', 'big', 'houses', and 'buildings'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard phrasing, such as 'that buildings will occupied less space' and 'peoples' (which is incorrect; the plural of person is people). You attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'apartment blocks' and 'facilities', but the range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and avoiding informal or incorrect pluralizations will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Large cities has', 'that buildings will occupied'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors, such as 'those families who has more than 5 members'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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