Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There is an ongoing debate about the considerable decline in human shelters , due to which they provide enough homes in big cities is to manufacturing of tall apartment blocks for people . I partially agree with this statement which i will discuss in my upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand , there are some reasons why tall apartments should be build in large cities? First and foremost reason is more people in less area . To be more precise , many big cities provide tall building to people as shelters because they can get more and more facilities there , Where supply of water , electricity , good education . Due to that people should get better lifestyle in urban areas. A survey which was conducted through The British broadcasting cooperation revealed that 89% of individuals who have their own apartments urban area they have no issues related to resources .
On the other hand , there are some disadvantages of this trend . First of all, disaster prone. To explain it , there are many larger buildings and apartments which sometimes faces problems such as earthquake, floods and droughts occurs on that places which cause damage to that apartments . An article by English Times revealed that 8 out of 10 people from Tamil Nadu faces issue related to disasters from tall houses.
In conclusion , Although there are many benefits of living in tall apartments , But they never neglect its disadvantages . If masses build there house according to their choices then it will be proven beneficial not only for one but also for the whole society.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding 'facilities' and 'disasters' are somewhat superficial and rely on questionable evidence (e.g., the reference to 'The British broadcasting cooperation' and 'English Times'). While a position is stated, the conclusion is vague and does not clearly reiterate the stance or provide a synthesis of the arguments. The essay meets the minimum length requirement, but the depth of analysis is insufficient to reach a higher band, as the ideas are not fully extended or supported with convincing logic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'First of all' and 'To explain it'. Some transitions are awkward, such as 'Due to that people should get better lifestyle', which hinders the logical progression of ideas. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the introduction where the connection between 'human shelters' and the prompt is confusing. While the paragraphing structure is present, the internal cohesion lacks the flexibility required for a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'manufacturing of tall apartment blocks' (instead of 'construction') and 'decline in human shelters'. The student attempts to use some academic vocabulary, but the collocations are frequently incorrect, such as 'disaster prone' used as a noun phrase. Spelling errors, such as 'cooperation' (instead of 'Corporation') and 'there house' (instead of 'their'), are present. The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety needed for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('many larger buildings... which sometimes faces problems'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing ('due to which they provide enough homes'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and question marks used incorrectly in statements. While the meaning is generally clear, the persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. More attention to sentence structure and proofreading for basic errors is necessary.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.