Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In cities, the population is increasing day by day. Providing homes to the increased growth is the greatest challenge for government. The vertical structure buildings provided the best way to give the living space to each person within reasonable cost. While, the families who wanted the privacy, demands the separate house, accommodation can given to only fewer people. So I agree with the concept of long buildings that are consisted on greatest number of apartment.

To begin with private homes, local communities are filled with large and small houses, where they are spending their whole life. Homes are surrounded by attractive garden filled with grass, birds, insects, fountains, glossy and shinny flowers that are providing the health benefits to the children, elderly people. But in these living societies, marts , hospitals, schools, parks are apart from houses. Long drives needed to reached at specific area. People who get injured during any curricular activity, they will not access the facilities from hospital on exact time, and may cause serious damage to someone's health.

On the other side, inside the vertical largest building, separate area like laundry area, small clinics, tuck shops, parking areas, emergency staff for any accident are specified before building's construction. The architectural map is made under the observation of the experts. Single building supplies large benefits to greatest number of people. It may have same undesirable facts like some people faces the lift related issues, many of them do not interested in social interactions. Gardens are not available for personal used like available in private homes, buildings are not strong enough to stand during natural disasters.

In conclusion, every sectors have its pros and cons. but I strongly agree with the development of long-heighted building. When we made them a large space is left behind and that land is used for more commercial purposes. Libraries, Schools, Welfare-Centers, and many other organization will be constructed and it is beneficial for the local citizens who migrated or who already living here.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student addresses the task by discussing the provision of homes in large cities through tall apartment blocks. They present arguments in favor of this idea, highlighting both the benefits and drawbacks of vertical living and private homes. However, the development of ideas could be clearer, and some arguments are underdeveloped or vague, causing a slight lack of depth. Therefore, the response meets the task requirements but could improve in depth and clarity, thus meriting a score of 6.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a basic level of coherence and cohesion, with a clear structure of introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, some linking phrases are awkward or missing, leading to occasional confusion in the flow of ideas. For example, phrases like 'to begin with private homes' and 'on the other side' could be more smoothly integrated. Overall, the logical connection between ideas is observable but could be enhanced, placing this criterion at a score of 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student's lexical resource displays a reasonable range, using terms related to the topic such as "vertical structure buildings" and "local communities." However, some phrases are awkward or imprecise, such as "greatest challenge for government" and "long-heighted building," which could be expressed more effectively. While some vocabulary choices are apt, a richer variety of precise and relevant vocabulary is needed, resulting in a score of 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical accuracy is inconsistent throughout the response, with several errors in sentence structure and verb forms, such as "accommodation can given" and "demands the separate house." Some sentences are overly complex or confusing. However, meaning is generally clear despite these issues, so the overall grammatical range and accuracy can be rated at a score of 5.

Overall feedback

Your essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear opinion, which is an essential part of Task Achievement. However, to earn a higher score, consider developing your ideas further and providing specific examples to support your points effectively. In terms of coherence, work on smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs to strengthen the flow of your arguments. Pay attention to grammatical errors and sentence structure for clarity, as this impacts Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Regular practice and feedback will help improve these areas significantly.

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