Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To begin with private homes, local communities are filled with large and small houses, where they are spending their whole lives. Homes are surrounded by attractive garden filled with grass, birds, insects, fountains and glossy flowers that are providing the health benefits to the children, elderly people. But in these living societies, marts , hospitals, schools, parks are apart from houses. Long drives are required to reach at specific area. People who get injured during any extra curricular activity, they will not access the facilities from hospital on exact time, and may cause serious damage to someone's health.

On the other side, inside the vertical largest building, separate area like laundry area, small clinics, tuck shops, parking areas, emergency staff for any accident are specified before building's construction. The architectural map is made under the observation of the experts. Single building supplies large benefits to greatest number of people. It may have same undesirable facts like some people faces the lift related issues, many of them are not interested in social interactions. Gardens are not available for personal used like available in private homes, buildings are not strong enough to stand during natural disasters.

In conclusion, every sector has its pros and cons, but I strongly agree with the development of long-heighted building. The land is used for more commercial purposes. Libraries, Schools, Welfare-Centers, and many other purposes will be constructed and it is beneficial for the local citizens who will migrate in near future or who already living here.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student presents a clear opinion, agreeing with the idea of building tall apartment blocks to provide homes. However, the argument lacks depth and thorough development of ideas, with some points not fully explained. For instance, they mention health benefits and accidents but do not elaborate on how tall buildings address these issues effectively. Additionally, the conclusion could better summarize the main argument and reinforce the response more strongly. Overall, while the position taken is clear, the argument could be developed more thoroughly to fully meet Task Achievement expectations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is somewhat coherent, with ideas organized into distinct paragraphs. The transition from discussing private homes to tall buildings is noted. However, the connections between ideas could be improved; for instance, the transition between discussing community benefits and the drawbacks of tall buildings lacks clarity. Phrasing such as "the vertical largest building" is awkward and could be rephrase to ensure smooth coherence. More varied linking words and phrases would enhance fluency and help with the flow of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource shows variety, but there are instances of awkward phrasing that detract from clarity, such as "long-heighted building" and "specific area" which could be more precisely stated. While there is some attempt to use specialized vocabulary (e.g., "emergency staff"), some terms are vague or incorrect. Additionally, there's an inconsistency in singular/plural usage, as seen in "largest building" which sounds clumsy. Expanding vocabulary choices and using more precise and appropriate words would improve the overall quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical accuracy in the response shows some issues, such as agreement errors (e.g., "many of them are not interested in social interactions") and awkward structures. Sentences often lack the necessary conjunctions and are at times overly complex, leading to confusion. Simple sentence structures could enhance clarity. There are errors in articles and prepositions that affect fluency, such as "to reach at specific area," which should be "to reach a specific area." Improved accuracy and grammatical range would significantly benefit the response.

Overall feedback

The student exhibits an understanding of the topic and presents arguments in favor of building tall apartment blocks. However, the response lacks sufficient depth and development of ideas, which hinders clarity and persuasiveness. Improved coherence between ideas and clearer connections would strengthen the overall argument. In terms of language, varying vocabulary and sentence structure would enhance the sophistication of the writing. Focus on developing each point more thoroughly, as well as improving grammatical accuracy, will help in achieving a higher band.

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