Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It has long been a subject of discussion whether large cities blocks the homes due to large apartments. In this essay, the former notion, has several elements that deserve attention and i am partially agree the best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartments blocks. Which i will elaborate i upcoming paragraph before reaching a concrete conclusion.
To commence with, one of the sporting statement build tall apartment block. To clear it precisely, tall buildings overlaps the small homes. Moreover, its pollute the environment. Fore instance, Delhi is the capital of India, which highlighted the importance of increasing population. Hence, every one gets their home to live life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 114 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for an opinion on building tall apartment blocks, the response is underdeveloped and lacks a clear, sustained argument. The ideas presented, such as 'tall buildings overlaps the small homes,' are unclear and lack logical support or relevant examples. Because the response is severely under-length and the arguments are not fully developed or supported, it does not address the task requirements adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The introduction is confusing, and the transition into the body paragraph is abrupt. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the phrase 'To clear it precisely,' which does not effectively link ideas. The lack of a clear conclusion further hinders the overall flow. The writing feels like a collection of loosely related sentences rather than a cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which impedes communication. Phrases like 'large cities blocks the homes' and 'sporting statement' are non-standard and confusing. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology related to urban planning or housing. There is significant repetition of basic words, and the lack of precision in word choice makes it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. A much wider range of vocabulary is needed to express complex ideas clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. Examples include 'i am partially agree' (should be 'I partially agree'), 'its pollute the environment' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'every one gets their home to live life.' Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, including verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. The limited range of structures and the high frequency of errors make the text difficult to read.
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