Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In cities, the population is increasing day by day. Providing homes to the increased growth is the greatest challenge for government. The vertical structure buildings provided the best way to give the living space to each person within reasonable cost. While, the families who wanted the privacy, demands the separate house, accommodation can given to only fewer people. So I agree with the concept of long buildings that are consisted on greatest number of apartment.

To begin with private homes, local communities are filled with large and small houses, where they are spending their whole life. Homes are surrounded by attractive garden filled with grass, birds, insects, fountains, glossy and shinny flowers that are providing the health benefits to the children, elderly people. But in these living societies, marts , hospitals, schools, parks are apart from houses. Long drives needed to reached at specific area. People who get injured during any curricular activity, they will not access the facilities from hospital on exact time, and may cause serious damage to someone's health.

On the other side, inside the vertical largest building, separate area like laundry area, small clinics, tuck shops, parking areas, emergency staff for any accident are specified before building's construction. The architectural map is made under the observation of the experts. Single building supplies large benefits to greatest number of people. It may have same undesirable facts like some people faces the lift related issues, many of them do not interested in social interactions. Gardens are not available for personal used like available in private homes, buildings are not strong enough to stand during natural disasters.

In conclusion, every sectors have its pros and cons. but I strongly agree with the development of long-heighted building. When we made them a large space is left behind and that land is used for more commercial purposes. Libraries, Schools, Welfare-Centers, and many other organization will be constructed and it is beneficial for the local citizens who migrated or who already living here.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. You have identified relevant arguments, such as space efficiency and the integration of amenities, which supports your position. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat uneven. While you mention the benefits of vertical living, the counter-arguments regarding privacy and natural disasters are introduced but not fully explored or refuted in a way that strengthens your main argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more specific reasoning or examples rather than just listing features. Overall, the position is consistent throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To begin with', 'On the other side', and 'In conclusion', to signal the progression of your argument. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition 'So I agree with the concept...' at the end of the introduction. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences within paragraphs lack smooth logical flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly connects to the previous one will help improve the overall cohesion of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to discuss the topic, including terms like 'vertical structure', 'architectural map', and 'commercial purposes'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'long buildings that are consisted on', 'glossy and shinny flowers', and 'long-heighted building'. Some of these errors, while noticeable, do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for common academic phrases and avoid over-descriptive or informal adjectives that do not fit the formal tone of an IELTS essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('families who wanted... demands', 'many of them do not interested'), article usage, and prepositional phrases ('reached at specific area'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some unnecessary commas and missing spaces after punctuation marks. While these errors are frequent, they rarely impede communication. To move to a higher band, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and refining your control over complex sentence structures to ensure they are error-free.

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