Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In cities, the population is increasing day by day. Providing homes to the increased growth is the greatest challenge for government. The vertical structure buildings provided the best way to give the living space to each person within reasonable cost. While, the families who wanted the privacy, demands the separate house, accommodation can given to only fewer people. So I agree with the concept of long buildings that are consisted on greatest number of apartment.

To begin with private homes, local communities are filled with large and small houses, where they are spending their whole life. Homes are surrounded by attractive garden filled with grass, birds, insects, fountains, glossy and shinny flowers that are providing the health benefits to the children, elderly people. But in these living societies, marts , hospitals, schools, parks are apart from houses. Long drives needed to reached at specific area. People who get injured during any curricular activity, they will not access the facilities from hospital on exact time, and may cause serious damage to someone's health.

On the other side, inside the vertical largest building, separate area like laundry area, small clinics, tuck shops, parking areas, emergency staff for any accident are specified before building's construction. The architectural map is made under the observation of the experts. Single building supplies large benefits to greatest number of people. It may have same undesirable facts like some people faces the lift related issues, many of them do not interested in social interactions. Gardens are not available for personal used like available in private homes, buildings are not strong enough to stand during natural disasters.

In conclusion, every sectors have its pros and cons. but I strongly agree with the development of long-heighted building. When we made them a large space is left behind and that land is used for more commercial purposes. Libraries, Schools, Welfare-Centers, and many other organization will be constructed and it is beneficial for the local citizens who migrated or who already living here.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. The ideas are relevant, such as the efficiency of land use and the integration of amenities. However, the development is somewhat uneven. While the benefits of vertical living are discussed, the counter-arguments regarding privacy and natural disasters are mentioned but not fully explored or refuted in a way that strengthens the overall argument. The conclusion introduces new ideas about land use for commercial purposes, which is a good point, but it could have been integrated earlier to provide a more cohesive argument. Overall, the task is addressed, but the depth of analysis is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central theme. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'To begin with private homes' or 'On the other side'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and some transitions between sentences feel abrupt. While the paragraphing is sufficient, the flow of ideas could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect arguments more fluidly rather than relying on simple transition markers.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use more descriptive language, such as 'vertical structure buildings' and 'architectural map', but some word choices are imprecise or non-standard, such as 'long-heighted building' or 'consisted on'. The use of 'glossy and shinny' is slightly repetitive and informal. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on more precise collocations and academic vocabulary, avoiding repetitive phrasing and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('families who wanted... demands', 'many of them do not interested') and article usage. Some sentences are awkward, such as 'accommodation can given to only fewer people'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, the student should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and pluralization, which would allow for more complex structures to be used with greater accuracy.

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