Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In cities, the population is increasing day by day. Providing homes to the rapid growth of the population is the greatest challenge for government. The vertical structure buildings provide the best way to for living space to each person within reasonable cost. While, the families who want the privacy, their demand is of separate houses. Therefore, I agree with the concept of apartments because they are space efficient and can accommodate more families.

To begin with private homes, local communities are filled with large and small houses, where they are spending their whole lives. Homes are surrounded by attractive garden filled with grass, birds, insects, fountains and glossy flowers that are providing the health benefits to the children, elderly people. But in these living societies, marts , hospitals, schools, parks are apart from houses. Long drives are required to reach at specific area. People who get injured during any extra curricular activity, they will not access the facilities from hospital on exact time, and may cause serious damage to someone's health.

On the other side, inside the vertical largest building, separate area like laundry area, small clinics, tuck shops, parking areas, emergency staff for any accident are specified before building's construction. The architectural map is made under the observation of the experts. Single building supplies large benefits to greatest number of people. It may have same undesirable facts like some people faces the lift related issues, many of them are not interested in social interactions. Gardens are not available for personal used like available in private homes, buildings are not strong enough to stand during natural disasters.

In conclusion, every sector has its pros and cons, but I strongly agree with the development of long-heighted building. The land is used for more commercial purposes. Libraries, Schools, Welfare-Centers, and many other purposes will be constructed and it is beneficial for the local citizens who will migrate in near future or who already living here.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. The ideas are relevant, such as space efficiency and the integration of amenities, but the development is somewhat uneven. While you mention the benefits of vertical living, the counter-argument regarding private homes is a bit descriptive rather than analytical. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph focuses on extending your main arguments with more depth and specific reasoning rather than listing features like 'birds, insects, and fountains'. The conclusion effectively restates your position, but ensure your main points are consistently supported throughout the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To begin with', 'On the other side', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved. For instance, the transition between discussing private homes and the need for hospitals is slightly abrupt. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'these living societies') is always precise will improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'vertical structure', 'space efficient', and 'architectural map'. However, there are some instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'long-heighted building' (should be 'high-rise' or 'tall buildings') and 'glossy flowers'. Some collocations are also slightly unnatural, such as 'get injured during any extra curricular activity'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and more precise academic terminology to express your ideas with greater clarity and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the rapid growth', 'the best way to for living space'), pluralization, and sentence construction (e.g., 'the families who want the privacy, their demand is of separate houses'). Some sentences are slightly fragmented or lack correct preposition usage. To achieve a higher band, focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage, and try to incorporate more complex sentence forms with greater accuracy.

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