Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

[Part-2]

Some people believed that the good way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

Overall, Both the statement hay there own berefits and ideas but I would like to disagree with this statement because build tall apartment blocks can effect our social problems like less oxygen, carbondi-oxide.

first of all, there are many disadvantage of reasons of build tall

apartment blocks such as:-

i) people's can suicide from buildings.

ii) people's personal accesories may fall down from their apartment sometimes by mistakely.

iii) This will be very effective for children's mental health who suffering from are a acrophobia.

Secondly, The city will see asethetic if we build small building with differend designs and look gergeous from aeroplane and many individuals would like to tour our city to look our building and

get ideas to make their own they will be inspired from us ; our city . Tall apartment may show boring without any designs and without good environ- ment.

Moreover, It is neccessary to get communicate with our surrounded peoples to keep our environment clean and good relation, If we live in apartme- nt and build tall building the city would not have good greenery environment and fresh oxygen. Sometimes it

is necessary

is very ~~necessary~~ to fell

air and fresh oxygen because

it will help our health

very good benefit. If there

are small building we

can grow our own small

plants in our garden which

will help us to get

fresh air and to fell

refreshed sometimes when

we fell bored.

Therefore, In my opinion

It would be bad way

to provide a large

tall buildings apartment

blocks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is weak and often illogical. For instance, the argument that tall buildings cause 'less oxygen' or that people will 'suicide from buildings' lacks a logical foundation and fails to provide a convincing argument for an academic task. The points regarding 'aesthetic' appeal and 'acrophobia' are mentioned but not sufficiently supported with relevant examples or depth. The response tends to over-generalize and lacks the analytical rigor expected for an IELTS Academic Task 2 essay, resulting in a limited development of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While some cohesive devices like 'first of all', 'secondly', and 'moreover' are used, they are often applied mechanically and do not always link ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing is inconsistent, with some sentences appearing fragmented. The overall structure is present, but the flow between sentences and paragraphs is frequently interrupted by the lack of logical connection and the repetitive nature of the arguments presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally causes difficulty for the reader. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'asethetic' (aesthetic), 'gergeous' (gorgeous), and 'mistakely' (mistakenly). The student struggles to use precise terminology related to urban planning or social issues, relying on basic and sometimes incorrect phrasing like 'fell air' instead of 'breathe fresh air'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly, and the spelling errors are frequent enough to be noticeable throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people's can suicide'), article usage, and sentence structure. Complex sentence attempts are rare and often contain significant errors, such as 'This will be very effective for children's mental health who suffering from are a acrophobia'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary hyphens and erratic capitalization. While simple sentences are attempted, the lack of control over basic grammar makes the text difficult to follow and significantly impacts the overall quality of the writing.

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