Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the modern era, people prefers to settle in an urban area with seamless accessibility and modern lifestyle. As a result, few people believe that high rise buildings and apartment blocks should be constructed to accommodate large population in the limited square feet area. Somehow, I disagree with an idea of building tall buildings to expand the house market in metro cities by compromising wide landscape and greenery which together makes a city worth to live in.

Urbanisation has drawn population to bigger cities which has become a turning point for overall growth and development of cities. For example, the modern infrastructure focuses on mass accommodation of people in a building rather than highlighting per square feet area needed and availability of fresh air through greeneries nearby. Consequently, more trees are cut down to expand the land for building enough houses. As a result, lack of oxygen may lead to compromised lung capacity of residents and an elevated pollution rate in the city.

Tall apartments need regular maintenance and human resources to manage big facilities. Hence, the housing market of buildings escalate to compensate their hidden cost. Nevertheless, an increased cost of housing does not justify an overall living situation of people in large cities. For example, people migrate to urban cities for better lifestyle and fast paced life but eventually living in a congested areas indirectly compromise their mental well-being.

To conclude with, I disagree on the idea of building tall apartment blocks to provide enough homes because in a long run, accommodating more families in cities will compromise overall well-b

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against tall apartment blocks. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you mention environmental concerns and mental well-being, the arguments are not fully extended. For instance, the link between tall buildings and 'lack of oxygen' is a scientific overgeneralization that weakens the argument. Furthermore, the conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, which prevents a final summary of your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph explores the 'why' and 'how' of your claims with more logical depth and ensure the essay is fully completed within the time limit.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central theme. You use cohesive devices such as 'As a result', 'Consequently', and 'Nevertheless' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the phrase 'compensate their hidden cost', where the antecedent is unclear. The most significant issue is the abrupt ending, which disrupts the overall coherence of the piece. To reach a higher band, focus on smoother transitions between sentences and ensure the conclusion provides a cohesive summary of the arguments presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas, using terms like 'urbanisation', 'infrastructure', and 'accommodate'. There are some instances of awkward collocation or word choice, such as 'few people believe' (which implies a small number, whereas you likely meant 'some people') and 'expand the house market'. Additionally, 'fast paced life' requires a hyphen. While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire to include more academic collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('people prefers') and article usage ('an idea of', 'the limited square feet area'). Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'the housing market of buildings escalate', which should be 'the cost of housing in these buildings escalates'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article consistency.

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