Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, whenever individual thick about buying something, they always keep various point before investing in it because there is sector like luxury, healthcare and investing in assets which depends the points to be considered. In society some people believe that price is the only consideration point while purchasing anything. While, I partially believe that I disagree and agree with the statement and my response is discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

In this contemporary era, living in a developed society where every individual is concern about their comfort and appearance. In the result, they give the quality and material of the product at first preference which allows them to think on right items for them and buying from a trusted brand price never be a concern. To exemplify, my friend always procures the clothes and shoes from Puma which is a trusted brand. One of the major points is durability of the product which denotes the lifeline of the specific product. As result, people can save money and no need to buy same for longer time.

In the medical and health sector no one bypass the line and always prefer safety on the top priority and use good quality products for their health and never consider price while purchasing or investing in it. The not only disagree with the statement but also there is one major agree points to mention which is a middleclass people while investing or buying a house, property or a big vehicle by some individual makes the budget at initial stage and always consider the price before buying it because it is a major financial investment. To exemplify, my colleague has invested in a property and before buying it he checked the price in various location with 5 to 6 agents to ensure the price.

To conclude, in my opinion the statements depend on some various factor before buying or investing in it and that is safety, comfort and durability and there are advantages in these factors. Considering this factor they do not think about the price. But some middleclass people while investing in properties they consider the price the before buying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an opinion on whether building tall apartment blocks is the best way to provide housing in large cities. However, your essay discusses consumer behavior, brand loyalty, and the price of goods like clothes and medical products. Because you did not address the specific topic of urban housing or high-rise buildings, the response fails to meet the requirements of the task. To improve, you must carefully analyze the prompt and ensure your arguments directly relate to the specific question asked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is illogical because the content does not relate to the prompt. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To exemplify' and 'In conclusion', they are used to connect irrelevant ideas. The referencing is often unclear, and the overall structure does not support a coherent argument regarding the task. To improve, focus on creating a clear thesis statement that directly answers the prompt and ensure each paragraph develops that specific argument with relevant supporting points.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'individual thick about' (think about) and 'no one bypass the line' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over collocation. There is some attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary related to business and finance, but it is not relevant to the prompt. You rely on repetitive and basic language. To improve, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary that fits the context of your argument.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede clarity. Examples include 'every individual is concern' (concerned), 'no need to buy same' (the same), and 'the middleclass people while investing... makes the budget' (subject-verb agreement issues). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors in syntax or word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and sentence structure before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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