Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
As everyone knows the fact that homes are basic need for every people to live as it provides roof to people to keep themselves safe and to protect their families so probable way to give that basics it should be built as tall apartment blocks. My agreement of this approach should described by that essay with some disagreement.
By building those tall apartments those people can gain the benefits of park and walking area in their blocks as well as more neighbours are available there than other flat houses so they can be the part of this and it also provides some more space to government to recruit other necessary buildings which proves affordable and beneficial for the surrounding. As a result, it becomes easier for people to live in apartment than other ground houses.
Despite, it has some problems such as, the bills of electricity and food resources also the festival funds which are held in that apartments are much more as compare to non-apartment societies. Additionally, those covered the view of sky by kissing the sky and provide suffocating environment that affects their children and also the various kind of personalities in the blocks are proves dangerous sometimes. At the end, dark outsider vision becomes the reason of hating tall apartment blocks with large amount of financial problems and some negative energies.
By the way of conclusion, built high apartment blocks in large cities is good approach but it also has some worst conditions for those who are not capable to adjust with the changes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of tall apartment blocks. However, the position is not consistently clear; the introduction mentions both agreement and disagreement, but the body paragraphs lack a cohesive argument. The ideas are somewhat underdeveloped, particularly the points regarding 'festival funds' and 'dark outsider vision,' which are vague and lack logical support. To improve, you should focus on clearly stating your position in the introduction and ensuring each body paragraph contains a well-explained main idea supported by relevant examples or reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as 'By the way of conclusion' or 'At the end'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard collocations, such as 'kissing the sky' to describe tall buildings and 'dark outsider vision'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and avoid informal or overly metaphorical language that does not fit the context of an IELTS essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('various kind of personalities... are proves'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to read. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency.
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