Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The efficient way to provide sufficient housing in major cities is to construct high-rise apartment blocks. I partially agree to this statement because by this method we can save land and can provide housing to hundreds of people in limited land.

On one hand, By constructing a tall apartment blocks can save land and can provide a houses for hundreds of people in limited land because in major cities land consists of very limited. This process can save money which was having high land prices. By constructing apartments and saving land for development of city by building such as, companies, shopping malls. For example, constructing a 30-storey apartment can provide homes for hundreds of people in limited land by saving land space.

On another hand, The apartments are been very overcrowded because of that residents may have limited private outdoor space. The major problems are such as noise, traffic and very high pressure on lifts can occur. We don't have freedom to conduct parties in houses. we always have restrictions and rules for people. For example, Instead of building skyscrapers, government could convert commercial buildings to apartments and have to develop affordable housing on suitable land at outside of city center.

In conclusion, Providing enough houses in large cities is to construct skyscrapers can built houses in limited land can develop another free space for city developments such as, For companies, shopping malls. People may save money on having high land prices. For some people can face very difficult living in an apartment for having limited private space, overcrowded and traffic issues.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout, acknowledging both the benefits and drawbacks of high-rise living. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding 'saving land' is mentioned in the introduction, the first body paragraph, and the conclusion without significant expansion or new insights. While the response covers all parts of the task, the supporting examples, such as the mention of 'companies' and 'shopping malls', are brief and lack depth. To reach a higher band, you should aim to explore the implications of your points more thoroughly, perhaps by discussing the socio-economic impact of high-density housing on urban infrastructure or community well-being.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'On one hand' and 'On another hand' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed. For example, the sentence 'This process can save money which was having high land prices' is confusing and lacks a clear logical link to the preceding statement. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'by building such as, companies, shopping malls', which lacks a proper noun or noun phrase to complete the thought. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'save' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'The apartments are been very overcrowded' (should be 'can be') and 'by building such as, companies' (which is grammatically and lexically awkward). While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'high-rise apartment blocks' and 'skyscrapers', the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated synonyms and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The apartments are been'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('by this method we can save land and can provide housing'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of commas in lists or after introductory phrases. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading your work to correct basic tense and agreement errors and practice constructing more complex sentences with accurate punctuation.

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