Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
These days,when we power on the TV .We heard news about having insufficient homes in large Cities.Some people argue that we should build tall apartment blocks to solve this problem but some of them contend that this is not right way to solve this problem.I completely agreein this essay.I will support my opinion with examples.
Initially,some individuals believe that buying a new apartment instead of entire house is inexpensive and affordable. For instance,in our country most of the population is poor and dreamed for thier own home but it is so tough to arrange whole house in urban areas.So,some organizations and our authorities collaborate to build huge buildings for thier public for residence purpose at lower rates.So that everybody wish would be fulfill.In this way,a large amount of population can manage in less space.
On the other hand,most of the citizens love to spend thier lives in conjested flats in large buildings because several people belonging to different cultures and civilizations live and invest thier presious time together and reduce the gap between the Our state should take a major step to contract residence area and expand commercial zone to boost our economy.In this manners any nation can compete in this modern world.
In a conclusion,many of residents consider that small units in buildings is more beneficial over the undivided houses. I strongly agree that it is not only beneficial external factors but also asist our internal affairs.It gave opportunities for expansion of industries,factories and furthermore.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you clearly state your position, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding 'commercial zones' in the third paragraph is not clearly linked back to the main topic of providing homes. The ideas are relevant but lack the depth and extension required for a higher band. To improve, ensure you fully explore the implications of your arguments and provide more detailed supporting evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by awkward transitions and unclear referencing. For instance, the transition 'In this manners' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Initially' and 'On the other hand', they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately. The connection between sentences within paragraphs is often weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning consistently throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety needed for a higher score. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'conjested' (congested), 'presious' (precious), and 'contract residence area' (which is unclear). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and pay closer attention to spelling and the correct usage of words in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'TV .We'), and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'everybody wish would be fulfill'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses, article usage, and punctuation, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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