Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays many large cities are facing a serious problem of housing shortage. some people believe that best solution is to build tall apartment blocks while others do not agree with this statement. i partly agree with this view because high rise building provide more homes but also they create some problems
To begin with , there are several reason why i agree with this view. The main reason is that tall apartment block cam accommodate a large number of people. This is because many homes can built be built relatively small area of land. for example , a single high rise building can provide accommodation for hundreds of families. As a result this can help reduce the shortage of housing in large cities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. While you state a position, the argument is underdeveloped and lacks the necessary depth to fully address the prompt. You mention that high-rise buildings create 'some problems' but fail to elaborate on what these issues are, leaving the argument incomplete. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and counter-arguments, ensuring you meet the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'As a result', the overall structure is fragmented. The lack of a conclusion and the limited development of the body paragraph make it difficult to follow a clear, coherent argument. To achieve a higher band, you need to organize your essay into a clear introduction, well-developed body paragraphs with topic sentences, and a summary conclusion, using a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is functional but basic. You rely on simple, repetitive phrases such as 'large cities', 'housing shortage', and 'build'. There is little attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary that would demonstrate a higher level of proficiency. For example, instead of repeating 'build', you could use 'construct', 'erect', or 'develop'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to urban planning and housing, and try to vary your word choices to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'many homes can built be built' (passive voice error) and 'there are several reason' (pluralization error). You also have punctuation issues, such as missing spaces before commas and inconsistent capitalization. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited use of complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction. Once you are comfortable with these, try to incorporate more complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences to demonstrate a wider range.
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