Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The excellent path to offer enough homes in huge towns is to construct big flat barriers.

It is highly beneficial to that the huge homes are construct in towns and we develop big flats . It reasons that towns is very fruitful than streets Because streets are dirty and towns are clean and very well . I live in street their are so many issues to live in street one of them are people thrown garbage outside the bin or streets because peoples has not any awareness they can do those work in which he can likes but he did not though that cleanness is very essential component of our life they stuck the garbage in the street and that is the major problem of our lungs .

In towns their are so many facilities to have like playing ground or mosque and hospital all of them are separate . People thrown garbage on the inside of bin and because they have awareness to clean our home in towns one of the significant role people create they walk every day and they improve creativity imagination thinking skill. So that is the reason towns is very tidy than streets Because peoples have knowledge all the work which can do most of the benefit admire that .

In my opinion both are better but i strongly believe that towns is very benefit because all the time they can neat and people is also looks like peace and stronger than streets those peoples which are live in streets so towns has much benefits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the core of the prompt, which asks about the suitability of 'tall apartment blocks' as a solution for housing in large cities. Instead, the essay discusses the general differences between 'towns' and 'streets' in terms of cleanliness and facilities. The argument is largely irrelevant to the topic of high-density housing. The position is unclear, and the ideas are not developed in relation to the specific question asked. Consequently, the response does not meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is illogical and difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas effectively. The use of referencing is often confusing, particularly the repeated, unclear comparison between 'towns' and 'streets'. The overall structure does not support a coherent argument, and the relationship between the ideas presented is frequently unclear to the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'big', 'good', and 'clean'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'flat barriers' instead of 'apartment blocks' and 'huge homes are construct' instead of 'constructed'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the misuse of terms often impedes the clarity of the message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the intended meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with issues in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'towns is very fruitful'), tense usage, and article usage. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further hinders readability. The majority of sentences contain errors.

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