Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people suggest idea for provide enough home in large cities is to build huge buildings that will provide space to live. I disagree with the idea, constricting huge building in large cities would provide enough house for peoples. But this idea have some disadvantages which is considerable.

However, some individuals have phobia of height thus they don't want to live on top floors because of their fear. Constricting huge building in large cities have some disadvantages. Which are following, the 100th floor might be a obstacles for birds and airplane to flew also at the top floors of building the oxygen level is very low while the price of the top floors are not pocket friendly.

Furthermore, these huge buildings would provide enough living space to people but staying at top floor will cost them so expensive in terms of financially and physical health.

To conclude, huge building gaves spaces for living but its not healthy for over pocket and physical health as of now they have their own disadvantages which we can't ignore them. Hence, i disagree with the idea that construct huge buildings will provide enough space for live.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position against the prompt, the arguments provided—such as the 'phobia of height' or 'oxygen levels'—are underdeveloped and lack logical depth. The task requires a more balanced and thorough exploration of urban planning solutions. Because the essay is substantially under-length (192 words), it cannot fully address the prompt, leading to a lower score in this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Furthermore' to link ideas, but the progression is often disjointed. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, with sentences that do not always flow logically from one to the next. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall organization feels repetitive, particularly in the conclusion where the same points are restated without adding new insight or synthesis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'huge buildings' and 'disadvantages'. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'constricting' (likely meant 'constructing'), 'gaves' (gave), and 'over pocket' (likely meant 'our pockets'). These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary related to urban development and housing, and ensure that your collocations are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('this idea have'), incorrect verb forms ('airplane to flew'), and sentence structure ('Which are following, the 100th floor...'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some attempts at complex ones that are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further detracts from the overall accuracy of the writing.

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