Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that in the large cities is only suitable with tall building because enough space will be distributed to the all public. Although i strongly agree with the statement, as cities became over crowded nowadays.

One of the major reason is that cities are over-crowded as more and more people stated living in the cities. There are two kinds of people move in cities one is the lower income family who moved in metropolis cities to search for employment and another one is wealthy family who are already stable in cities for looking for high class properties. Both needed a house so that apartment is the good option for them because it saves space. weather its a small apartment or a larger one. Moreover, if a wealthy family purchase a flat it has following benefits for example: everything is nearby to their apartments, many tall building offer controlled entry, as well as amenities of gym, pools, parks and garden facilities.

It has following benefits as well as easy access to restaurents, offices, school, and hospital. It has more changes for social opportunities like cultural event and entertainment program organise in society through it more people will know each other. Tall buildings offer secruity and higher floor provide fantastic view and better natural light. In contrast, high rise building is essential especially in metro cities like Delhi, Mumbai, banglore, kolkata because population of these areas is incresigly high people didint have space to live anywhere. The smart solution of it starting living in apartment. There are various types of apartments available on these cities so every living class.

In conclusion, in large cities is only suitable for small building because these cities doesnt have space to live inividually. People started living in apartmets where amanties, safety, convienence, social opporunities facilities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The essay addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. While you mention benefits like amenities and social opportunities, the arguments are presented as a list rather than a cohesive discussion. The conclusion contains a significant error, stating that large cities are 'only suitable for small building,' which contradicts your introduction and the main body of the essay. To improve, ensure your conclusion aligns with your stated position and focus on developing two or three strong, distinct arguments rather than listing many points briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and missing transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In contrast,' the connection between sentences is often weak. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where 'It has following benefits' is used repeatedly without a clear antecedent. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is incomplete and lacks a proper concluding sentence, which hinders the overall progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the main message, but there is a lack of precision and frequent errors in word choice and spelling. Examples include 'inividually' instead of 'individually,' 'restaurents' for 'restaurants,' and 'incresigly' for 'increasingly.' You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'metropolis cities' (redundant) and 'living class' (incorrect). To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling of common words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the essay contains frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. You struggle with subject-verb agreement ('cities are over-crowded,' 'cities doesnt have space') and article usage ('the all public,' 'the lower income family'). Sentence construction is often fragmented or run-on, such as in the final sentence, which is a list of nouns rather than a complete grammatical structure. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for missing articles and punctuation errors.

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