Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE BETTER OPTION TO PROVIDE HOUSES IN BIG CITIES IS TO CONSTRUCT TALL BUILDINGS BLOCKS.I THINK IT IS GOOD IDEA TO BALANCE THE SHORTCOMING OF SPACES IN THE LARGE CITIES.

TO BEGIN WITH THE BENEFITS OF CONSTRUCTING BIG STOREY BUILDINGS IN THE URBAN AREAS IS , IT SHOULD BE EXTREMELY HELPFUL FOR WORKING INDIVIDUALS TO LIVE NEAR THEIR WORKPLACE AS MANY BIG INDUSTRIES ARE LOCATED IN THE URBAN SITES AND PEOPLE ARE SHIFTING FROM THEIR HOME LOCATION TO NEAR THE WORK AREA SO IT WILL HELP THEM TO SAVE THEIR TIME AND MONEY. SO, THEY PREFER TO RENT A APARTMENT RATHER THEIR BUILDING THEIR OWN HOUSE THEIR. MOREOVER, NOWADAYS THERE ARE HUGE SHORTAGE OF LAND IN THE CITY AREA AND PROPLE FIND IT DIFFICULT TO PURCHASE A LAND FOR BUILDING THEIR HOUSES SO IT SHOULD BE BETTER IF THERE ARE FACILITY TO BUY AN APARTMENT IN A BUILDING RATHER THAN FINDING THE SEPARATE LAND. FOR INSTANCE, PROPLE ARE SHIFTING FROM RURAL AREAS TO URBAN AREA FOR MANY REASONS AND IN A BIG BLOCK BUILDING MANY PEOPLE LIVE IN A SAME AREA INSTEAD OF CONSTRUCTING A HUNDREDS OF HOUSES SEPARATE.

FURTHERMORE, DUE TO HIGH POPULATION AND THEIR RAISING NEED OF HOUSES ULTIMATELY FORCES TO CUT FORESTS RAPIDLY WHICH EFFECTS GLOBAL WARMING AS WELL AS ANIMALS LOST THEIR HOUSES TOO. SO CONSTRUCTING BIG BUILDINGS CAN SHELTER MANY FAMILIES IN A SAME PIECE OF LAND RATHER THAN CONSTRUCTING A HOUSE FOR EACH ONE OF THEM IN SEPARATE LAND. FOR EXAMPLE, DUE TO DEFORESTATION, GLASSIER ARE MELTING AND IT EFFECTS GLOBAL WARMING TOO. SO FOR SAVING THE ENVIRONMENT WE NEED TO PROTECT THE FOREST AND BUILDING BIG APARTMENTS ARE BEST OPTION TO REDUCE CUTTING OF TREES.

IN CONCLUSION, BUILDING TALL APARTMENTS HELPS TO SHELTER MANY INDIVIDUALLY IN A SAME AREA APART FROM IT IT CAN ALSO HELP TO PROTECT CUTTING OF FORESTS FOR NEEDS OF MILLION OF SINGLE HOUSES. BESIDE, IT WILL ALSO SUPPORT WILD ANIMALS TO STAY IN THEIR HOMES.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. The ideas are relevant, focusing on urban convenience and environmental preservation. However, the development is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the environmental argument. While the position is clear throughout, the supporting arguments could be more nuanced. For instance, the discussion on deforestation is a strong point, but it lacks specific examples or deeper analysis to reach a higher band. The response covers all parts of the task, but the depth of argument is limited, which is characteristic of a Band 6 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central theme. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'it should be better if there are facility', where the pronoun 'it' lacks a clear antecedent. Paragraphing is present, but the flow between sentences could be improved to create a more natural progression of ideas. Overall, the structure is coherent, but the cohesion is not always smooth.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'shortcoming of spaces' instead of 'shortage of space', and 'raising need' instead of 'rising need'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles with collocations (e.g., 'purchasing a land' instead of 'purchasing land'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of flexibility and the presence of errors in word choice prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. More sophisticated vocabulary related to urban planning would enhance the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('animals lost their houses'), incorrect article usage ('a apartment', 'a hundreds of houses'), and awkward sentence construction ('ultimately forces to cut forests'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas and unnecessary capitalization. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips.

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