Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowadays, the demand of houses increase day by day but the best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to bring tall apartment block. Due to the fact that, if enough homes will provide in largest cities that prove helpful for the society. The main agenda of the upcoming paragraphs is to elaborate my viewpoint that to what extend I agree with his statement .
To being with , as the rising the demand of homes in large cities the most of the villagers shift from rural to urban areas peoples live with there family consequently then need more space for staying. consequently , build tall apartment assists for well settled in home moreover it will prove beneficial for environment it also assist to saving the space of the land .
In addition , build tall apartment block in large cities help to save land scape so that new companies and park is built in extra space that prove beneficial for everyone for entertainment and for other government facilities . On the other hand,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 176 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a position, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. For instance, you mention 'saving space' in both the second and third paragraphs without providing specific, well-supported examples or a nuanced discussion of the topic. The response is also incomplete, ending abruptly with 'On the other hand,'. Because the task is not fully addressed and the length is insufficient, the response falls into the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at paragraphing, but the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition' and 'consequently', but they are often used incorrectly or repetitively. For example, 'consequently' is used twice in the same sentence structure, which is awkward. The lack of a conclusion and the abrupt ending further disrupt the logical flow of the argument, making it difficult for the reader to follow a coherent line of reasoning.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'build tall apartment block' and 'prove beneficial'. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'bring tall apartment block' instead of 'construct' or 'develop', and 'well settled in home' which is not a standard collocation. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively, and the errors in word formation and collocation are noticeable throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('demand of houses increase'), tense usage ('if enough homes will provide'), and sentence structure ('Due to the fact that, if enough homes...'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper grammatical control. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods.
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