Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
These days population increase day by day we provide home built tall apartment blocks in the large cities that people live easily in this stuation.
In these days population increase day by day we not live easily we face many problem. Increasing population is a big problem for the present year. People face many problem such as food, water, no enough place to live their.
In these days people face many problem food water. But the main problem is not any enough place where they live. This is the main problem. People have no any place to live and spent our life happily.
In this case the best way in the large cities is to build tall apartment blocks that people buy this apartment easily and they live in this apartment easily and start our life in these days people live easily
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for an opinion on whether tall apartment blocks are the best solution, the response fails to provide a clear, sustained argument. The ideas are repetitive and lack the necessary depth, examples, or logical extension required for an academic essay. The position is barely articulated, and the response does not address the complexity of the topic, resulting in a very limited discussion that fails to meet the basic requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. Ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, with significant repetition of phrases like 'In these days' and 'people live easily'. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text feel like a series of disjointed statements rather than a coherent argument. Paragraphing is attempted but is ineffective because the content within the paragraphs does not follow a logical flow or develop a central theme. The overall structure is rudimentary and fails to guide the reader through the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. The student relies on a limited set of words such as 'problem', 'people', 'live', and 'easily'. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay. Collocations are frequently unnatural, such as 'provide home built tall apartment blocks' and 'no any place'. The lack of variety and the persistent misuse of basic terms significantly hinder the ability to convey complex ideas or maintain a formal tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'population increase'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'we not live easily'). Punctuation is largely absent, and the lack of complex sentence structures makes the writing feel simplistic. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incoherent, which forces the reader to guess the intended meaning. The high frequency of errors throughout the short text indicates a lack of control over basic grammatical rules.
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