Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays,the construction of home,factories,buildings have become risen with the flow of time.There is no enough land to provide a raw houses to the people because of the population has notoriously increased in the last 2 decades as a result build a tall apartment blocks is best way to provide homes in large cities and I am totally agree with this statement.I will explain my opinion in upcoming passages with novel ideas.
Build tall apartments is beneficial for governments as well as citizens because living cost has become very expensive and all people can not afford the purchase bungalows,the second reason is there is not enough land to build tenaments and raw houses for living.tall apartments take small place to build up and its provide wide range of living homes to people.the number of factories has increasingly as compared to earlier days.Tall apartments gives better view of cities to people and mosquitoes can not reach that too much height.In large cities are flooded with crowd and heavy traffic in order to build tall apartments is one of the solution for provide enough house to every individual.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 185 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and under-developed. While you state your position clearly, the supporting points—such as the claim about mosquitoes or the view from tall buildings—are not relevant to the core issue of urban housing density. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more logical reasoning and concrete examples, ensuring that every point directly addresses the prompt's focus on urban planning and housing solutions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. The paragraphing is insufficient, with the introduction and body paragraphs merged or poorly delineated. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'the second reason is', the flow between sentences is often disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of logical transitions. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'construction of home... have become risen' and 'raw houses'. The use of 'tenaments' is misspelled, and the phrasing 'mosquitoes can not reach that too much height' is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and improving your control over word forms. Avoid informal or irrelevant vocabulary and aim for more sophisticated collocations related to urban development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of factories has increasingly'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'In large cities are flooded with crowd and heavy traffic in order to build tall apartments is one of the solution'. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures. To improve, practice using a wider range of complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses and conditional structures, while ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct punctuation.
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