Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The assertion that building high-rise apartment blocks in big urban centers can give plenty of homes. I completely disagree with this statement as these buildings has high possibility collapse in earthquake as well these buidlings can cause global warming.

There are several reasons to disagreement with this view. One important reasons is that tall apartment blocks can cause collapse during earthquake. If these high-rise apartments counstruct without proper planing and guidline they can't survive during earthquake. when earthquake accure these buildings can't Tolerance jolt of eathquake and it could cause collapse. As a result, i can became

death trap where a lots of residence on a life risk. For example, In Japan in 2011 eathquake called 'Great East Japan Earthquake' causes 500+ deaths in urban cities and most of the deaths causes because of these high rise apartments collapse.

Moreover, buidling high rise apartment blocks in big urban centers can cause global warming. The high rise buildings can damage biodiversity with high dense population. When buildings becaming more tall these building residents use more and more vehicals and airconditoners which makes a lot of carbon emission. Therefore, This carbon emission can disbalanced the biodiversity of these perticular cities. For instant, In Dhaka ,capital city of Bangladesh, the rate of carbon emission increasing day by day in residencial area where are the most of high-rise apartments blocks located and in a servey feedback shows that the main reason of carbon emissions is the air conditioners. consequently Dhaka became one of the most air polluted city of the world

in conclution, i firmly disagree with the view of building high rise apartments blocks in large cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against high-rise buildings. However, the development of ideas is limited and relies on questionable premises. The argument regarding earthquakes is over-generalized, as modern engineering standards in many cities mitigate these risks. The second argument regarding global warming is also underdeveloped, as it fails to acknowledge that high-density living can actually be more energy-efficient than urban sprawl. While the position is consistent, the supporting evidence is not entirely logical or well-reasoned, which limits the depth of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical. While cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Therefore' are used, they are sometimes applied incorrectly or in a way that does not logically connect the ideas. For instance, the transition from the earthquake argument to the global warming argument is abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a proper concluding summary—which is essentially just a restatement of the introduction—weakens the overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'counstruct' (construct), 'disbalanced' (upset the balance), and 'perticular' (particular). The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to express complex ideas with precision. Some phrases, such as 'death trap' and 'jolt of eathquake', are used in a way that lacks the academic tone required for Task 2. Improvement is needed in both spelling and the use of more sophisticated, context-appropriate terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('these buildings has', 'most of the deaths causes'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as 'As a result, i can became death trap'. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The control of basic grammar is not consistent enough to reach a higher band.

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