Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Yes, i agree with the statement that to build homes in the tall apartment blocks to provide enough spaces in big cities. Because the big cities actually the main hubs for the education, jobs, healthcare and technology. many people move from their small cities to big cities for better oppertunities of education, jobs, better healthcare or for the ease of there life. All these things cause the high population in big cities and this lead to the shortage of homes. Which is becoming a real problem for big cities. Because of this the people face problems like high rents and higher costs of everything. So, the tall apartments blocks can solve this problem to some extend in big cities. This can provide much space for homes and more people can get opertunities of better life in big cities. The tall apartment blocks can provide more people with more homes and the can live there life in better healthcare and with better education. As many of the students move from their home to big cities for best education and faces many problems from which one of them is to find a suitable place to live. This problem of big cities can be solved by the big and large apartments. This is also a nessacity of time in the world of increasing population which was leading to the shortage of food and land. So the statement to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartments blocks is absolutely correct.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention reasons such as population growth and the need for housing, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, you mention 'better healthcare' and 'education' multiple times without explaining how tall buildings specifically facilitate these services beyond simply housing people. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or counter-arguments to demonstrate a more nuanced understanding of urban planning challenges.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a clear structure in an IELTS Task 2 response. The ideas are presented in a single block, making the progression difficult to follow. While there are some cohesive devices used, such as 'Because of this' and 'So', they are often used repetitively or at the start of almost every sentence, which makes the flow feel mechanical. To improve, you should organize your essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs with distinct points, and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'big cities', 'problems', and 'better'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'oppertunities', 'opertunities', and 'nessacity', which detract from the overall quality. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to urban development, such as 'high-density housing', 'urbanization', 'infrastructure', or 'sustainable development', and ensure you check your spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the tall apartments blocks'), subject-verb agreement, and word forms ('live there life' instead of 'live their lives'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the persistence of basic errors limit the score. To improve, focus on using a variety of complex sentences (using 'although', 'whereas', or 'consequently') and proofread to correct basic errors in articles and pronouns.
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