Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is often argued that construction of tall apartment in urban area is the best way to provide enough homes. I completely agree with thie view because sereval people can live on a building.
To begin with, as the world population is increasing the best way to provide residence is by building tall apartment blocks. People from remote place travel to cities for job opportunities. Construction of skyscapers is the best solution for this problem. Tall apartments can provide housing to large of people where land is expensive. Most of the people cannot afford to buy land in urban areas due to scarity of land. If there is demand of something, the price of that thing will skyrocket. To overcome this problem, the building are build tall. Moreover, urban areas are densely populated it can provide some space for construction of hospitals, school and parking areas. People travels to urban areas for the using the facilities.
Another important reason is that tall apartments are often built near offices, hospitals, schools and public transport. This can reduce commuting time. Individuals donot need to spend time and money to travel to that place. This can result in traffic mangement. Since tall bulidings are constructed near office and school people donot used transportation facilities to reach their. It can reduce the carbon emissions as less vechicles tarvels on the road. As, vechicles are the main source of carbon emissions. Sky is free from air pollution and hill can see fr
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While you provide relevant arguments regarding land scarcity and commuting efficiency, the conclusion is missing, and the final sentence is incomplete, which prevents a full development of your argument. To improve, ensure you reach the word count by fully expanding on your points and providing a clear, complete conclusion that summarizes your main arguments. The ideas are relevant but remain somewhat superficial due to the lack of depth and the abrupt ending.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt at logical progression. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Moreover', but the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and the incomplete final sentence. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'reach their', where the object is missing. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and a logical conclusion. The abrupt ending significantly disrupts the overall coherence of the piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some relevant terms like 'urban areas', 'job opportunities', and 'carbon emissions', but there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'thie' (this), 'sereval' (several), 'skyscapers' (skyscrapers), and 'scarity' (scarcity). These errors do not completely impede communication, but they do limit the sophistication of your writing. To improve, focus on learning collocations and proofreading for common spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Examples include 'building are build tall' (buildings are built tall), 'large of people' (a large number of people), and 'people donot used transportation' (people do not use transportation). Subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency are areas that need significant attention. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.
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