Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The 0ptimal meth0d t0 0ffer h0useh0ld acc0rding t0 the requirement in metr0p0liten cities is t0 c0nstruct vertical building bl0cks.I agreed 0n this because vertical expensi0n in a densely p0pulated city is c0mpartively easier than 0f h0rtiz0nal expensi0n. Furtherm0re, tall apartments are m0re spaci0us and add the beauty 0f cities than 0f apartments 0f 0nly three 0r f0ur fl00rs.
Building a skyscraper is m0re c0nvienet as c0mpare t0 h0riz0ntal gr0wth. As time passes the p0pulati0n als0 increases rapidly and an earth bec0me a scare res0urse. The scarcity 0f land causes hardship t0 pr0vide impel am0unt 0f h0mes, theref0re m0dern requirement f0r the c0nstructi0n 0f h0use is pr0tized high building w0rldwide. Many 0verly p0pulated cities are already c0nverted int0 tall building f0rest. F0r instance, Dubai and Newy0rk.
High rise buildings are 0ccupaing minimum land and 0ffers maximum space with pr0viding beautiful l00ks. N0wadays, infrastructure are planning in a ways that is m0re spaci0us having 50 0r m0re fl00rs t0 given required acc0mdati0ns m0re0ver adding elegance and prettiness in states that enhance the l00ks 0f city but als0 captivate the t0risum.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 178 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and lack the necessary depth and supporting evidence required for a high band. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the supporting points regarding land scarcity and aesthetics are under-developed. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and specific examples to fully address the prompt's complexity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the basic structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions like 'Furtherm0re' and 'F0r instance' are used, but the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression of ideas is hindered by the brevity of the response. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
There is a noticeable number of spelling errors throughout the text, such as '0ptimal', 'meth0d', 'h0useh0ld', and 'metr0p0liten'. These errors, combined with the use of numbers instead of letters, distract the reader and indicate a lack of control over written English. The vocabulary range is limited, relying on basic terms like 'pretty' and 'beautiful'. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling, as these errors impede communication and reduce the sophistication of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('infrastructure are planning') and incorrect word forms ('impel am0unt', 'pr0tized'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often simple or contain errors that affect clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding spacing after periods. To improve, you should practice constructing more complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions and focus on proofreading to eliminate basic grammatical slips.
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