Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In today's world, many large cities increasing pouplation in shortage of housing .I will discuss my viewpoints in the upcoming pargraphs.
To commence with, many peoples are living a small area of land. Land in major cities is often expensive and limeted. for example, in the large cities such as a honk- kong and singapur apartment and towars for people to live there . Many apartments are very crowed and people not visit there. however, many people live in big villa as well as big house and they are enjoy there life. while, many apartment block are very expensive and not affordable.so many people live in simple house.
On the other hand. it is best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build all apartment blocks. Many people not affordable the apartments because there prices very high. Moreover, many people live in very short home and they are enjoy our life because the were not any income work. whilw, it is dificult to by a new house for them. many people are made a expensive apartment block and they are rented in there apartments and many people love there in the apartments .and also they are enjouy there life .
In conclusion, it is very important a build tall apartment block in our society. however many people can a benifites for rented apartments and they were rising a rented day by day . moreover , many people enjoy a apartment block and also thery are made a apartments blocks ,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding tall apartment blocks, but the position is unclear and poorly developed. While the writer mentions the topic, the arguments are repetitive and lack logical support. The ideas are often contradictory or confusing, such as the mention of 'big villas' which does not directly address the prompt about high-density housing. The response fails to provide a coherent argument or a clear stance, resulting in an underdeveloped essay that does not fully meet the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect (e.g., 'To commence with', 'however', 'moreover'). Many sentences are disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the transition between ideas is abrupt, which significantly hinders the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'pouplation', 'limeted', 'towars', 'crowed', 'benifites'). The writer struggles to use precise terminology related to urban planning or housing, relying on basic words that do not convey the intended meaning effectively. The lack of variety and the high frequency of errors in basic vocabulary significantly limit the ability to communicate complex ideas clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many peoples are living'), sentence structure, and tense usage. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also problematic, with many sentences ending abruptly or being run-on. The range of structures is very limited, and the high density of errors makes the text difficult to read.
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