Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THERE IS ONGOING DEBATE ABOUT WHETHER CONSTRUCTING LARGE APARTMENT FLOORS TO PROVIDE ADEQUATE HOMES. WHILE I ACKNOWLEDGE THAT IT MAKES AREA LITTLE CONGESTED. I LARGELY AGREE WITHT THE STATEMENT BECAUSE PROVIDING LARGE NUMBER OF HOUSES IN LIMITED AREAS AND ANOTHER ONE IS BETTER FACILITIES. THESE FACTORS MAKE THE PROPOSED VIEW MORE CONVINCING IN MOST CIRCUMSTANCES.

One of the strongest reasons for my position is that

LARGE NUMBER OF HOUSES IN LIMITED AREAS. This is primarily because IT WILL REDUCE THE TRAVELLING TIME AND COST . When HOUSES ARE NEARER TO DOMAIN, it can result in LESS TRAVEL TIMES, which is

particularly important for A WORKING PEOPLE. In addition, PRODUCTIVITY ALSO IMPROVES. For example, THE HOUSE IS NEAR TO OFFICE IT HEPLS THEM TO WORK MORE TIME AND DECREASE IN TRAVEL TIMES

EXAMPLE]. This illustrates that [LINK TO POSITION]. Therefore, the evidence and reasoning support a high

degree of agreement with the statement.

BODY PARAGRAPH 2 — SECOND SUPPORTING REASON Another vital argument is that [REASON 2]. This

can be explained by the fact that [EXPLANATION]. Consequently, [RESULT]. For instance, [REALISTIC

EXAMPLE]. This further reinforces the view that [YOUR POSITION]. Although the opposing perspective may

have some merit, its impact is less significant when compared with the broader benefits or consequences

described above.

OPTIONAL BALANCE SENTENCE It is sometimes argued that [OPPOSING VIEW]. This argument is

understandable because [WHY PEOPLE THINK THIS]. However, it overlooks the fact that [YOUR

REFUTATION]. As a result, I believe that the original statement remains more persuasive.

CONCLUSION In conclusion, I largely/strongly agree with the view that [RESTATED POSITION]. Although the

opposing argument may be valid in certain situations, the stronger effects of [REASON 1] and [REASON 2] make

my position more convincing overall

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to address the task adequately as it relies heavily on placeholders and template text. While the introduction attempts to state a position, the body paragraphs are largely incomplete, containing labels like 'BODY PARAGRAPH 2' and 'REASON 2' rather than actual content. The student has not developed any arguments or provided relevant examples, leaving the prompt largely unanswered. The response is essentially a structural outline rather than a completed essay. To improve, the student must replace all placeholders with original, fully developed arguments and specific examples that directly address the prompt regarding tall apartment blocks.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression because the content is missing. While the student uses some cohesive devices like 'In addition' and 'Therefore', these are attached to incomplete or repetitive ideas. The paragraphing is non-existent as the text includes meta-commentary labels instead of coherent paragraphs. The overall structure is fragmented, making it difficult for the reader to follow a train of thought. To improve, the student should focus on writing complete, well-connected paragraphs that flow logically from one point to the next without using structural placeholders.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'large number of houses' and 'reduce the travelling time' are used without variation. There are also significant errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'constructing large apartment floors' (instead of blocks) and 'nearer to domain' (which is unclear). The reliance on template phrases further restricts the range of vocabulary. To achieve a higher score, the student needs to use a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and ensure that words are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is weak, with frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and article usage. For example, 'IT HEPLS THEM TO WORK MORE TIME' contains a spelling error and awkward phrasing. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper grammatical control. The use of all-caps throughout the response is also inappropriate for an academic task. To improve, the student must focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on reducing the frequency of grammatical errors that impede clarity.

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