Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks . This though have become a growing concern in both social well being and society . I am going to give my opinion in it as well as .
In other hand some human being like to live in a peaceful area and some people like live in a crowded place .every body have their own concept to live in a crowded place of peaceful place .providing enough home in large city it doesn't mean we need to tall apartment block we can buy a the field and build a beautiful house .we can live with of family as we can share happy movement .there are a lot of people in the word they live in a first floor they have a enough space where they spend their life as well as .
In one hand, people also have enough homes in a small village or a small city .they are leaving there in comfortable .leaving with family .sharing tradition, celebrating festivals in a small place so it does not mean we are living in a village we don't have enough place to live as well as.if we have a big apartment block it is very dangerous for us like if some nature problem cause like fire , flood come we will be in full trouble .it have a high risk it can damage of live like we have a important work we are in a rush we can be late first of all we need to take lift then go it will be taken a lot of time but if we have a small apartment block we can save our time .in small apartment block some emergency situation come we can just quickly got from their as well as.i have a big apartment block so I have experience this problem in my daily life .I all wise in the future I will
In my opinion we can provide enough homes in both large and small city we can simply live there without any trouble as well as.we don't need to build tall apartment block just make good and beautiful home is enough for everyone as well.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the topic but fails to develop a clear, consistent argument. While you state your opinion, the ideas provided—such as the dangers of fire or the time taken to use elevators—are not well-supported or relevant to the core issue of urban housing density. The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize a coherent position. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument that directly answers the prompt, rather than listing loosely related points about village life or personal anecdotes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often inaccurate or repetitive, such as the frequent and unnecessary use of 'as well as' at the end of sentences. Transitions like 'In other hand' (instead of 'On the other hand') and 'In one hand' are misused, which disrupts the flow of information. The progression of ideas is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring they are used correctly would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'good', 'beautiful', and 'big', which do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'nature problem' instead of 'natural disaster' and 'damage of live' instead of 'loss of life'. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and practice using these words in context to ensure they sound natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This though have become'), sentence fragments, and incorrect verb tenses. Punctuation is also problematic, with many sentences lacking proper structure or containing unnecessary spaces before punctuation marks. The range of grammatical structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct subject-verb agreement and the proper use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex structures.
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