Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Unanimously , in this period of inflation many people think the best way to provide accommodation in tier 1 cities is to build large apartment blocks , this has become prominent topic of discussion amongst people . Well in my opinion i strongly agree with this given notion and supporting towards my view will be discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion

firstly , supporting towards my agreement to the given statement . I strongly have a sense of belief that , building tall apartment blocks is a good way to provide many homes in big cities . To exemplify it , 80% of Bombay people lives in building rather than there own houses because it in building there a good security no one come directly to the building . Another aspect , if you buy a land and build in a house in that it will definitely cost you more than a flat in building . As a result , it will save a lot of money

Secondly, another supporting aspects in this given statement is , many middle class people can also afford a flat they don't have to always pay rent they can own their house . Hence , apartment provides many facilities like cricket ground for young age people , park , temple , swimming pool and many more , It will give you good chance to make a good contacts , For example , in a building around [redacted phone] family lives in which some are businessman , politicians , lawyers , doctors .

To conclude , i pen down the aforementioned given pointer heavily support my sense of belief that building apartments will provide enough homes in large cities which are worthy enough to support my view point . to make it more effective a joint effort of government is needed .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention cost-effectiveness and community facilities, the arguments are not fully extended. For instance, the example regarding '80% of Bombay people' is anecdotal and lacks a clear link to the broader argument about urban planning. To improve, you should focus on providing more analytical depth rather than listing features like 'temple' or 'swimming pool'. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph directly supports your central thesis with well-reasoned explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Unanimously, in this period of inflation' or 'supporting towards my view'. Some transitions are repetitive, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between security and living in buildings is somewhat disjointed. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences flow more naturally into one another without relying on repetitive introductory phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic descriptors like 'big cities' and 'good way'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'supporting towards my agreement' and 'make a good contacts'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and occasional errors in word formation (e.g., '80% of Bombay people lives') limit the score. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to urban development and housing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('80% of Bombay people lives'), article usage ('in building there a good security'), and awkward phrasing ('if you buy a land and build in a house in that'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and run-on sentences. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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