Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many people tends to believe that the construction of the huge apartments blocks is use a home in metropolitan cities. While I agree with high-top apartments are best option for living purpose.
In Big cities, the houses are much expensive due to large number of industries and offices. Local governments of these cities are working land for productive purpose rather than domestic applications. For example, Shenzhen is electronic hub of the world and the land of city is most productive for commercial and industrial purpose. Shenzhen government made high-ted colonies for living of Shenzhen to enhance the industries.
On the other hand, high flats enhance the beauty of Metropolitan cities. Mostly skyscrapers attract visitors of the country and other country as well. For example, Skyscrapers and flats of London looking impressive for international visitors. It effect on the economy of the UK. Moreover, tall building flats provide the more green-land for the metropolitan cities. It enough for living purpose. While other land is used for sports and other healthy activities.
Overall, the tall flats is much convenient for living purpose. Flats provide more privacy than big houses. It provides best way of life and short range place for big cities. Local government must enhance this factor.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position in favor of tall apartment blocks, the arguments remain underdeveloped. For instance, the point about 'green-land' is mentioned but not explained in a way that demonstrates how high-density living actually preserves space. The examples provided, such as Shenzhen and London, are relevant but lack sufficient detail to fully support your position. To improve, you must expand on your reasoning and provide more depth to your examples to ensure the task is fully addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'On the other hand' is used to introduce a point that supports the same side of the argument rather than a contrasting one. Additionally, some sentences lack logical flow, such as 'It effect on the economy of the UK,' which feels disconnected from the previous sentence. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'high-top apartments,' 'high-ted colonies,' and 'short range place.' These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and academic vocabulary. For example, instead of 'huge apartments blocks,' use 'high-density residential developments.' Expanding your range of synonyms and practicing correct word forms will significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the readability of the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Many people tends to believe'), article usage ('the land of city'), and sentence structure ('the construction of the huge apartments blocks is use a home'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with subjects and that articles are used correctly. Proofreading for these recurring errors will help you achieve a more accurate and professional tone.
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