Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays the proliferation of modern residence is surging so the favorable method is to build a huge flat for the citizens may occupy the less space than a home. I am largely agree with that this is necessarily significant for better civilization.
On the one hand living in a building with numerous people may develop the sense of humanity as well as the neighborhood that can not be mitigate by the residence of home. People living in a building together assist each other and with their interaction with multilingual would be the positive appreciation. Moreover, living in a same building may enhances the liabilities and people trust each other. For instance people living in a same household wants to go somewhere and they don't have anybody to assist that so they definitely trust to their neighbors because they totally believe them so this is the significant benefit people get from living in a same building.
On the other hand by living in a specific place may reduce the cost of living expenses as it helps to the residence to live their. Having a numerous apartment on a same building also provides enough place for the gardens and for public use. For example tall buildings contains a number of residence so the authorities get enough vacant space for public transportation and public parks and many other purposes.
In conclusion residence is plays a vital role for the place for public as it's demand is increase so the individuals might get off from the public facilities so it's necessary to live in a building together make the life easier for everyone.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention social benefits and cost-efficiency, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the claim that living in a building 'develops the sense of humanity' is vague and not clearly supported by logical reasoning. The conclusion is also quite weak, as it does not summarize your main points effectively but rather introduces a slightly confusing final thought. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear, well-explained argument with concrete examples that directly relate to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between and within sentences is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas that follow. For example, the transition to the second paragraph is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'that can not be mitigate by the residence of home', where the meaning is obscured by poor phrasing. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear logical progression between sentences will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and often imprecise, which occasionally makes your meaning difficult to grasp. You rely on basic terms like 'huge flat' and 'residence' repeatedly. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'proliferation of modern residence is surging' and 'interaction with multilingual'. These errors indicate a lack of familiarity with natural English collocations. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary and ensure that words are used in the correct context. Focus on learning phrases rather than isolated words to improve your precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that sometimes impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'residence is plays', 'demand is increase'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are awkward or incomplete, such as 'I am largely agree with that this is necessarily significant'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tenses will also help you achieve a higher score.
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