Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the advancemnt of home manufacturing industry, the best way is to offer maximum homes by tall residential bulding with home facilities in cities. I totaly agreed with this statment.

Recently popolation is increasing rapidly and demand for home are incraeasing also. To full fill the high demand of home residential tall buildings are very excelent option because this way provide the many home in very small land. For example if we can just build 3-5 villas in 10,000 square feet land but if we build 30 story building which can provide [redacted phone] appartments. S this provide the maximum homes with small part of land.

B. Moreover this way is economical very benificial such as we can save land and used this land for agriculture bussiness cost of matrial such for such 180 home we need lost of road, drange system wich consume very much construction matrial. so this way alsosave lot of money and this money can be use for industrial growth.

Similary, it this advancment also save our time and reduce poplution for example if somene need to go to job if the town is very large and it i must taht his work place willbe very far, so he/she definitly need lot time to raeach at work place. it alsoreduce polution and trafic blockadge by reduction trafic routes.

In conclusion, providing homes in tall apartment building have extraordinary benifit such saving land, construction material, saving peoples times, reduce polution. So, i suggest that we should consider tall building apartment for new home construction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. The main ideas—land efficiency, economic benefits, and reduced commuting time—are relevant. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding pollution and traffic is mentioned but lacks a clear logical link to how tall buildings specifically solve these issues compared to other urban planning strategies. While the position is consistent, the supporting arguments would benefit from more depth and specific examples to reach a higher band. The response is fully relevant to the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Similarly', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these markers is sometimes mechanical or slightly misused, such as starting a paragraph with 'B. Moreover'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences within paragraphs is sometimes choppy. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would enhance the overall coherence of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'advancemnt', 'bulding', 'totaly', 'popolation', 'incraeasing', 'full fill', 'appartments', 'benificial', 'matrial', 'drange', 'somene', and 'polution'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but there is a lack of flexibility and precision. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and expanding your range of collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'demand for home are incraeasing'), article usage (e.g., 'in 10,000 square feet land'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'if we can just build 3-5 villas in 10,000 square feet land'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with commas and sentence boundaries. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

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