Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The large cities are becoming extremely overcrowded and resulting in shortage of homes. Meanwhile, construction of tall apartments will provide enough space for accommodation. I agree that building tall houses can improve leave more land for other developments, But it consists of disadvantages such as collapsing of buildings due to overweight and improper maintenance.
I agree that construction of tall buildings is beneficial as it provides more space for accommodation of public in a single large apartments, then, other lands can be utilized for developmental purposes such as malls and public gardens for relaxation and leisure. Furthermore, large number of trees can be planted to improve the quality of air and reduce city chaos.
The main reason why I disagree with this statement is that the large aparcities can cause various issues like the building may collapse due to overweight improper drainage system msy lead to leakage problems.in terms of electicity is absent may lead to stairs unable to climb
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 160 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and lack the necessary depth and supporting examples required for an academic essay. While you state your position, the discussion of the disadvantages is fragmented and lacks logical expansion. To improve, you must ensure each body paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument with specific examples or evidence to fully address the prompt. The current length prevents a thorough exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'The main reason', they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. The transition between the advantages and disadvantages is abrupt, and the final paragraph is particularly difficult to follow due to fragmented sentences and unclear referencing. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'aparcities' (likely a misspelling of apartments or cities) and 'stairs unable to climb'. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to convey complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to urban planning and construction, while ensuring that your spelling and word formation are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'large cities are... resulting in shortage', and sentence fragments, particularly in the final paragraph where the structure breaks down completely. The range of sentence structures is limited, relying mostly on simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct punctuation and the use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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