Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The execeptional way to provide enough shelter in large metropolitan cities have to built huge buildings blocks.However, in this essay i partially agree with both kinds of statements as well as provide relevant example with suitable reasons.
The first and foremost merits of development lead to provide shelter for low academic background individuals such as SC ,ST, and middle class closeknitted families which consequences into living better quality lifestyles with loved onces. Moreover they educated their spohomore in well established learning platform to acquire primary to tertiary education resulting into foster in employment rate and earn money to fullfils their desire.However, every coined has two sides, so that this development lead to enhance shiftment from rural to urban area which consequence into incline traffic congestion in public transport.Therefore, i am partially agree with both statements.
On the other hand, the manufacturing of building apartment block in metropolitan cities to provide enough homes which significantly opportunities to take benefits of technology and widespread facilities.
Futher and even more importantly health is wealth, so that the merits of development to acquire the faclities of healthcare sector compared to rural areas, so that they can utilize the hospital facities during life threathening conditions.In stark contrast, there are severals demerits of development such as breakdown of buildings block due to earthquakes or tsunami which consequences into negatively impact on the contemporary society. Moreover, the higher chances of spreading infection during pandemic situation and arise multifarious impedements and rapidly infect virus to every individuals due to this development.
In conclusion , i once again reaffirm my position that it is a predominantly partially development in the society and provide shlter to every one .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. The writer takes a partial stance, acknowledging both merits and demerits. However, the development of ideas is heavily constrained by severe language limitations and unclear expressions, making the core arguments difficult to follow. For instance, the reference to specific social categories like 'SC, ST' feels disjointed from the general housing debate, and the arguments regarding natural disasters or pandemics are asserted without logical elaboration. The position is stated, but the ideas remain underdeveloped and confusingly framed throughout the essay, corresponding closely to Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
There is some basic organisation, with the essay divided into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and basic transitional markers like 'However' and 'On the other hand' are attempted. However, the overall progression lacks clarity and logical flow. Referencing is frequently unclear, and cohesive devices are often inaccurate or mechanically applied, such as the awkward transition 'every coined has two sides, so that this development lead to'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion breaks down due to run-on sentences and confused logical connections. This places the performance firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily flawed, with numerous inappropriate word choices and collocations that frequently impede communication. Examples include 'execeptional way', 'huge buildings blocks', 'shiftment', and 'life threathening conditions'. There are also frequent spelling and morphological errors, such as 'spohomore', 'fullfils', and 'impedements'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary, the high density of lexical errors and unnatural phrasing restricts the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the attempt to convey broader concepts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, and control over basic structures is weak. The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('shelter... have to built', 'development lead to enhance') and incorrect verb forms ('i partially agree', 'they educated their spohomore'). Complex sentence structures are frequently attempted, but they are almost entirely faulty, resulting in ungrammatical strings like 'so that the merits of development to acquire the faclities'. Punctuation errors are also prevalent throughout the text. These persistent, dense errors place the grammar at Band 4.0.
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