Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowdays, people face alot of issues regarding homes due to high rent of apartments and they are not abale to buy them. The builders build tall apartments in cities which require large amount of space so they destory the surrounding area to build these flats. In my point of view, I totally disagree with the state and give my reason on it.
To begin with, these tall building creates many problems in our nature and to construct them builders needs large amount of space. To create this space they clear forest because of that the flora and fuana speices are extint from our nature. Moreover, these building has negative impact on our globel warming and it also create pollution. Beside, sometime these tall flates are responsible of acciendents because some landlord don't check their buildings condition so in the end the apartments fall and many people die.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 147 words against the minimum requirement of 250 words. This significantly limits the development of the topic. While the writer attempts to present a position ('I totally disagree with the state'), the ideas remain underdeveloped and lack proper elaboration or specific examples. The points regarding environmental damage and safety hazards are mentioned briefly but are not fully explored or supported. Consequently, the response addresses the task only partially, aligning with the Band 4 descriptors for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into an introduction and one body paragraph, but the overall progression is disrupted by the lack of sufficient elaboration and the abrupt ending. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes misused, such as 'Beside' instead of 'Besides', and 'in the end' used inappropriately for structural collapse. Paragraphing is attempted, but the extreme brevity means the organizational structure cannot be fully demonstrated. Referencing is occasionally unclear, placing the performance at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with noticeable errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include spelling mistakes like 'Nowdays', 'abale', 'destory', 'fuana', 'extint', 'globel', 'flates', and 'acciendents'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'flora and fauna' and 'pollution', but the high density of basic spelling and word-choice errors restricts the lexical score to a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures frequently contain errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('these building has') and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is weak, leading to run-on sentences like 'To create this space they clear forest because of that the flora and fuana speices are extint from our nature.' Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4 criteria.
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